Time for another batch of below average feedback!
Can I please have feedback on my story "Charisma" please!
I, the wholly happy-go-lucky character, go through life on an alternate Earth with some 'minor' differences. Yes indeedy do! I promise an absolutely joyous time! I tell no lies. What minor differences you ask? Well, here's some advice. Don't drink that lava in a bottle, or you'll spend a night...
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(Read 32 Chapters)
Thoughts
That was a story I indeed read.
Umm.. You did a job on the main character. They very much exist.
Such a happy story with such good vibes
Anyway!
I Liked it.
Main character was great point point of view for this wacky crazy world. World building was fun, and I was interested in it.
A few tiny spelling mistakes here and there, but nothing bad.
No where near the level of mistakes I make...
Power system was neat, and how the story was written work really well.
I was very invested throughout, so yeah, keep up the good work!
Rating
Jake Ishida expected ordinary days when he moved to a new city. He did not expect the mysterious warrior, Pilot, to give him a strange crystal. The crystal transforms him into the Fire Radiant, a warrior of order. Now, he must learn how to utilize his new powers to fight...
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Here you go.
(Read 20 Chapters)
Thoughts
That was good fun.
It did really feel like I was reading the shows I watch on my couch as a kid. But just at much faster pace.
Ah yeah, not much else to say. I like it, but nothing was great. Characters were fine, and plot was okay. But I wasn't really grabbed though? I think I mostly kept reading (In one sitting, cause otherwise I would've read in short burst) because I found the fundamental idea interesting, Sentai type story.
Rating
Auras. The embodiment of one’s soul. A power that can only be used by a certain few with an iron will. They grant the user an unique ability that personifies what they are. Some use it for good, others use it for their own gain. Ymeno, a 25 year old...
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I really like your apple rating system, Thanks for doing this!
(Read 4 Chapters)
Thoughts
*Cough* Why do you only have 4 chapters?!
That was really good, I was invested very quickly and wanted to read more. But the four chapters also gave enough information that I was happy with my read, and I could understand where the story was headed.
I can't remember where, but there was at least one point where you went to a newline mid sentence. I should've marked where that that happens. But I guess just Becarefull.
umm yeah. I like the characters, obviously only a base level cause 4 chapters, but they were only introduced and developed well over these 4.
So overall opinion, that was good shit.
Rating
hiya
The year is 25 A.E., 25 years after The Empire united the human nations under its rule, wielding an arsenal of holy weapons known as homunculi. These magical beings, brimming with immense mana reserves, have been enslaved to serve as power sources and instruments of war. The Empire's grip...
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(Read 10 Chapters)
Thoughts
Wow, this because much easier when it is a story I have already read.
But umm yeah, I like it.
Look, it was a good simple story where I didn't really have anything to complain about. Nothing really to praise either? Like it was good, it was already on my reading list cause I enjoyed it.
Characters were fine, I can see them developing well as the story progresses. The plot was also alright, simple, but a simple isn't confusing!
So yeah, for the first ten chapters, they were a good beginning. I'm curious to see where/how it will develop.
Rating
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Current a green good (Which is still a good rating!), but I say depending on how the next ten chapters go, easily bump up to a red good.
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On another Note For the Other Stories
I'll read the rest, in about 2~3 days.
