Can i just do that?, Actually its from chapter 2 to 3, In chapter 2 was about the origin of wrestling in cultivation world, I use story telling, while in chapter 3 i just dump all cultivation info progress on the beginning, like the mc is still low leveled,but must know this because she has a mentor who teach it, cultivation thingy can be used later on,but for wrestling, i just use it for reference in future chapter.
Can you maybe check it? If its boring enough for first timer reader or not,because i've been reading This Chapter for like twelve times,maybe u can give me some feedback?
I think its fine. In many cultivation novels they can go on for an entire chapter just to describe the exact changes each realm brings, the perfect methods to break into said realms and other important bits about said realms. Compared to those yours is short and concise in comparison.
it doesnt link the chapter, just the overall story
Thanks for replying,
Are you that uncertain?
It is fine. Not the worst I've seen, but also, in my opinion, they are too dry, and lack a charming personality, especially as they are told from 1st POV, and too much cursing for my liking. If you are trying to make your MC childish, then you have succeeded.
I think too much cursing is not good too, I want my mc personality to be pure but have bottom line. Btw how to make it more charming, care for some writing method?
It just, i feel like iam still lacking as a writer, and want the best for my reader, maybe i have already dissapointed my ancestor's long ago.
Try recreating your MC's personality, and tell me if you're done with it. I gotta see what you made first before concluding.
Bro, this humble dude wants the best for his country and has the confidence of a saint. Well, he is a saint, after all.
This...is a hard question, one that I am still looking for an answer myself. One way I have been trying is just putting more personality into the narrator in your writing. Give a slight bias, inner thoughts, etc. I just read the first 3 chapters of your story, but I noticed that there was a lot of 'I did this, I did that, she is this, she is that', which is really dry.
Hey, that is great. You are striving to improve yourself, which is vastly better than most. As for your ancestor's expectations? C'mon, that is just peer pressure from dead people, and peer pressure ain't good!
Quick tip: Method Acting is useful. Be your MC and act similarly to them. You'll notice just how lacking your MC is.
Peer pressure is bad, yes. But please don't call our ancestors like that. We respect honourable elders even when they're dead.
I was raised Asian, 'course I respect my folk. Dead, living, and whatever in-between Limbo they are in! I was just making a joke.
I searched Method Acting in google,i think i know how it work,i just need to be my own mc right?, But can you please give me some example?, I mean like your application of method acting in your writing?.
Well, I'll check that out soon.
Info dump is not recommended. Feeding info to your readers should be done in small, but regular, tidbits...either through dialogue between characters, or events, if there's too much narration.