FirstSister

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    How do I reduce the word 'she' from my novel?
    Should I put the word 'he' instead?
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    No... I am serious (╯=▃=)╯︵┻━┻
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    To avoid overuse of pronouns, focus on the feeling of showing the reader instead of telling them. Her appearance in chapter 2 for example "El turned on the tap again and washed her face a second time before inspecting it in the mirror. Her skin looked dull, the result of almost two years without much special care. That couldn't hide the elegant and dignified beauty of it though.
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    Continued: Her full lips and dark brown eyes paired well with the sharp angles of her face to create an arrogant or even challenging impression on others. Men would describe her appearance more as sexy than sweet and cute. It was less likely that they would invite her out to eat; more likely that they would want to eat her."
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    FirstSister
    Hola hola...
    I appreciate that! ⚈ ̫ ⚈
    Thanks (✿╹◡╹)
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