Recent content by kingsky123

Hi i read your work and left a comment! i think the story is fine but i have issues trying to picture the world you are trying to build (Like its a world with magic, adventurer guilds, subsistence farming? poor villages? but has a modern car so i am kind of confused of the technological...

thank you again, clearly my work needs alot more polish. i will try again

thank you! I think i will work on it more before publishing again then. I'm getting good feedback from this experience. I think i need to review basic principles of wording before i attempt to progress further

when you write "the skill -can- be forcibly triggered during a full moon" , does it mean that she still has control whether to trigger it on a full moon, or it might happen on a full moon, or that it will be triggered during the presence of a full moon? But i guess the tale will be about her...

i feel that it reads like a translated version of a story. most JP and KR light novels have this sort of prose due to it being not English in the original content. Perhaps you can rephrase or re-do certain ways to narrating the story since it is written in English after all. But yeah, it has...

Overlord has an evil MC. Well he doesn't think he is evil but his actions thus far has pretty much cemented him being evil. (his carelessness and treatment of the people in the new world)

Hi, i enjoyed your chapter 1. But i think there were some grammatical errors " his father'd ever tell him" -> His father ever told him? "The old man scan his seven sons untill he laid eyes on wyrn" i think it should be scanned or maybe another word like surveyed but i think thats nitpicking at...

Hello, sorry for posting here as well but i hope you can review my first chapter for a novel i'm writing. it is in my signature

Hello, i would appreciate if you would review my chapter, it is in my signature

i like overlord. it had a pretty interesting setting and premise

isekai smartphone really threw me for a loop when he solved problems using everything BUT HIS SMARTPHONE

Hi everyone, I am new to the world of writing and having works written on such a site. I would love to have feedback regarding my writing and my stories. I have written a chapter and i hope it is captivating enough for people to want more...

i really like discworld, i think terry pratchet got absurdist humor down really well

I personally try to imagine what it would be like, so i can provide a description to everyone i write to what i think it would be like. for example if an alien comes to earth where would it land? does it breathe air? is it carbon based? Why is it here? all that jazz.

i know a couple writers that have beautiful prose, but their stories suffer as you can have passages basically describing an elegant dinner but the plot does not move. Personally having beautiful writing and descriptions are a powerful tool to have but just try not to forget in the end you...