Any feedback on the first parts of my story?

[Dohund]

I just want to know if it’s completely unreadable. Well, more than that, but some feedback on the first two chapters would be good. So I know whether to scrap it or try again. Please.

Story

 

[LilTV1155]

I just want to know if it’s completely unreadable. Well, more than that, but some feedback on the first two chapters would be good. So I know whether to scrap it or try again. Please.

Story

It's readable and there are few errors I have noted: impartial Italic, noncapitalized letters like "i" and a little grammar error.
But from the flow of the story, it's a little harder to connect to the character's 1st pov. The story's introduction vibes feels . . . . you might want to dump some spicy caffeine on it.