I read to the end of the latest chapter
Chapter 6: Hot Seat (1) and
appendix
Your link sent me to chapter one but I started with your prologue anyway.
Your story reads more like a 'supernatural' 'mystery' 'adventure' 'action' . At least, that's what i imagine the combo would read as. As i review stories I'm beginning to think i don't enjoy mystery that much.
I feel like I would have read something like this in high school. That's not bad, it just feels like it's at that level or audience.
Your writing flows pretty well, though i got annoyed when you had the flashback chapter. I wanted to see what happen right away.
You have put a good amount of thought into your Worldbuilding and detail. I appreciate it.
The prologue is interesting and fits with the story title, since darkness seems to operate contrary to what we know. But maybe that's because we don't live in the dark ages anymore.
The continuing tidbits are like little breadcrumbs.
I like the setting of the town, fog walls kinda reflect the darkness described in the prologue. A genereal uncertainty all around, good ambience.
The MCs quest reminds me of the beginning of
full metal alchemist, even though I've only seen the first few episodes of it. And it seems like dealing with the loss of their parents will be an important plot point. MC motivations are caring and decent, even if I think there are better ways of dealing with something like that. The mindfulness is what matters. The brother's relationship is a good one where they can rely on each other.
I hope MCs continue their benevolence and only break laws when they need to. It would be a shame if they began to act too selfish.