Garon
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This is not an ordinary post. And it will be very long. I wanted to write a novel that was more like a one piece with elements of sex and yuri harem. And although I started the story gloomily, I wanted to continue it later in a more pleasant way. But then I realized that I wanted to put a serious theme into it. What a soul. And what makes a human who he is. What is God, and is it possible to become one? This was my wish. But this may no longer happen. Even though I enjoy writing. I have no time or talent. I don't even know basic English. I can't do anything. I doubt that I will achieve anything further in life. And problems with other people prove this to me. Now I don't want to do anything. Just lie down and sleep forever. I don’t have a dream or the strength to accomplish anything. I don't need heaven. Just true nothing. Now I’m glad that some 30+ people read my writing. But I don't think I can continue this. So I just want to post a huge spoiler for my story. I want you to read and tell me if this story is worth anything? Maybe it's even can give inspiration to someone. Or don’t read it, I don’t force you.
So that's a lot of text. I wanted to write here the finale too, and find out if you like the idea. But I decided for myself that he was not interesting. If anyone liked it, (I don't know why so type). You can take it for yourself, I don’t care. I'm just curious if you find anything good here.
During a period when there was no actual time. There was emptiness. Pure nothing. And as a result of the miracle, an explosion occurred. A pulse of light that created two deities. Deities without gender or appearance. The entities were gods, but not creators. But they were not deprived of strength. One was a dreamer, the other an observer.
One deity was in eternal sleep, but had a mental connection with the other. Another could observe him and conduct a dialogue with him. He could not see what the dreamer was dreaming, but he could hear it. The dreamer had dreams all the time. Gray and meaningless. But the longer his sleep went on, the more he discovered. He had dreams of creatures that he could not understand, but which he gradually remembered. Languages that he did not understand, but at the same time he understood what the creatures were talking about. Things that in all his dreams were repeated again and again in his dreams. They were good and he shared them with others. He told him every scene he found interesting. But the scenes began to change.
They became worse, scenes of joy were replaced by horror and rage. The terrible images of other people's deaths, and the screams of agony of those who awaken. They were getting louder and he couldn't bring himself to ignore them. He felt their pain as if it were his own, he felt pain that he did not want. The Observer could not help him. He could only listen to him. He wanted to help him, unfortunately he only watched as he suffered. Eternal torment overtook the dreamer, and he made a single request. Kill himself.
He asked another god to kill him. And he fulfilled this request. After his death, the energy came out creating a second explosion. The observer, in the sadness of loneliness, tried to create the things he heard. But the things he created were not only false, created from light but existed only as images. But how can someone create something that he himself has never seen. How can a blind person understand what colors are? How can a deaf person understand what sound is? These are things that you need to understand yourself. Therefore, the images of his world that he tried to create, trying to replace loneliness, were terrible. Not complete. Empty. Unable to withstand loneliness and his helplessness, he kills himself. Creating a third explosion.
All these explosions led to an important point. Points of creation of the universe and life. The explosions created a hole in the universe. Allowing other people's souls to penetrate inside. These souls swirled in an eternal spiral along with the energy of the two dead gods. Creating a cycle of energy, enough energy to create life as we know it. Souls that were in eternal sleep woke up. And they absorbed the energy of the gods. Images from dreams appeared to them too. And they did not consciously create the earth for themselves. Life, blue skies, and beautiful green fields. All this appeared as a result of the unconscious dream of sleeping souls. And as soon as the bodies appeared, they began to fill them with themselves.
Yes, in my isekai story, the explanation of why people speak the same language is explained). Not only that, but throughout the story there will be scenes where the characters feel and see something normal. But they consider it wrong, and are unable to explain why. Different souls created the world based on their fragments of memories, manifested in their dreams, and the dreams of others. Where everyone will say that the sky is red. There will be those who will not believe, but feel deep within themselves that this is not so. And the backstory didn't end there.
Soon people appeared who could feel the energy. Take control of it, and understand that they have the power to influence the world. Change laws and reality by distorting other people's perceptions. One day they can force people to believe that they are birds, and they will become one. Truly the gods himselfs. But they appeared. Souls from other universes who remember who they are. Souls who are fully aware of their past world and their experiences. They became a threat to the gods. And so they began to try to control and manipulate them. Realizing that once they realize how this world works they will become gods like them. As a result, throughout the story the gods will try to manipulate mc by threatening to kill her love unless she tries to help them kill these special people. And mc would face different problems along with others throughout the story and gradually become better or worse with each arc. That was my original idea.
One deity was in eternal sleep, but had a mental connection with the other. Another could observe him and conduct a dialogue with him. He could not see what the dreamer was dreaming, but he could hear it. The dreamer had dreams all the time. Gray and meaningless. But the longer his sleep went on, the more he discovered. He had dreams of creatures that he could not understand, but which he gradually remembered. Languages that he did not understand, but at the same time he understood what the creatures were talking about. Things that in all his dreams were repeated again and again in his dreams. They were good and he shared them with others. He told him every scene he found interesting. But the scenes began to change.
They became worse, scenes of joy were replaced by horror and rage. The terrible images of other people's deaths, and the screams of agony of those who awaken. They were getting louder and he couldn't bring himself to ignore them. He felt their pain as if it were his own, he felt pain that he did not want. The Observer could not help him. He could only listen to him. He wanted to help him, unfortunately he only watched as he suffered. Eternal torment overtook the dreamer, and he made a single request. Kill himself.
He asked another god to kill him. And he fulfilled this request. After his death, the energy came out creating a second explosion. The observer, in the sadness of loneliness, tried to create the things he heard. But the things he created were not only false, created from light but existed only as images. But how can someone create something that he himself has never seen. How can a blind person understand what colors are? How can a deaf person understand what sound is? These are things that you need to understand yourself. Therefore, the images of his world that he tried to create, trying to replace loneliness, were terrible. Not complete. Empty. Unable to withstand loneliness and his helplessness, he kills himself. Creating a third explosion.
All these explosions led to an important point. Points of creation of the universe and life. The explosions created a hole in the universe. Allowing other people's souls to penetrate inside. These souls swirled in an eternal spiral along with the energy of the two dead gods. Creating a cycle of energy, enough energy to create life as we know it. Souls that were in eternal sleep woke up. And they absorbed the energy of the gods. Images from dreams appeared to them too. And they did not consciously create the earth for themselves. Life, blue skies, and beautiful green fields. All this appeared as a result of the unconscious dream of sleeping souls. And as soon as the bodies appeared, they began to fill them with themselves.
Yes, in my isekai story, the explanation of why people speak the same language is explained). Not only that, but throughout the story there will be scenes where the characters feel and see something normal. But they consider it wrong, and are unable to explain why. Different souls created the world based on their fragments of memories, manifested in their dreams, and the dreams of others. Where everyone will say that the sky is red. There will be those who will not believe, but feel deep within themselves that this is not so. And the backstory didn't end there.
Soon people appeared who could feel the energy. Take control of it, and understand that they have the power to influence the world. Change laws and reality by distorting other people's perceptions. One day they can force people to believe that they are birds, and they will become one. Truly the gods himselfs. But they appeared. Souls from other universes who remember who they are. Souls who are fully aware of their past world and their experiences. They became a threat to the gods. And so they began to try to control and manipulate them. Realizing that once they realize how this world works they will become gods like them. As a result, throughout the story the gods will try to manipulate mc by threatening to kill her love unless she tries to help them kill these special people. And mc would face different problems along with others throughout the story and gradually become better or worse with each arc. That was my original idea.
So that's a lot of text. I wanted to write here the finale too, and find out if you like the idea. But I decided for myself that he was not interesting. If anyone liked it, (I don't know why so type). You can take it for yourself, I don’t care. I'm just curious if you find anything good here.
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