SirDogeTheFirst
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Hello, I currently write a battle academy book, and I need feedback on the fight scene in Chapter 1:
I want to know if you think the combat flow is smooth or has holes and if my descriptions are decent or bad. Just chapter 1 will be sufficient, but if you want to, I won't say no to review of other chapters. (Also I tried to do that closing and opening spoiler thingy to not put a link, but failed to do it. If someone could teach me that I would appreciate it.)
Generic Battle Academia - Chapter 1: First Test Battle | Scribble Hub
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I want to know if you think the combat flow is smooth or has holes and if my descriptions are decent or bad. Just chapter 1 will be sufficient, but if you want to, I won't say no to review of other chapters. (Also I tried to do that closing and opening spoiler thingy to not put a link, but failed to do it. If someone could teach me that I would appreciate it.)