YusakuRay
New member
- Joined
- Dec 5, 2023
- Messages
- 22
- Points
- 3
Hi, y'all I recently started writing and completed my Introduction of my novel, If you have time I'd like some feedback in these parts primarily
1. 1st chapter because I notice most read the first chapter and don't move on to the next would like to know you're impressions/opinions if I should edit names or if there's something else im missing to add or if it lacks something? or maybe im just overthinking it and its fine as is (I'm happy with it myself.)
2. anything to add to make it easier for readers to help them not get mixed up with another person talking or thinking (i'm not sure how I'd fix that. maybe something like "so and so says.")
3. would like to know how's the pacing or maybe wait for the next 8 chapters to know for sure not sure when first dungeon chapters are done in isekai's (thinking about uploading in 8 chapter intervals maybe 4 because i find myself rushing to upload a chapter on time when I was uploading the initial 8.)
4. Also does the Illustrations help visualize some of the scenes?
5. Punctuation/Grammar
6. Tips to help with writing fight scenes ( I think I struggle with not making it drawn out enough as it can be/cool)
thank you for taking the time to read my post. will do my best to reply.
-Saku
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/994407/my-eternal-afterlife/
1. 1st chapter because I notice most read the first chapter and don't move on to the next would like to know you're impressions/opinions if I should edit names or if there's something else im missing to add or if it lacks something? or maybe im just overthinking it and its fine as is (I'm happy with it myself.)
2. anything to add to make it easier for readers to help them not get mixed up with another person talking or thinking (i'm not sure how I'd fix that. maybe something like "so and so says.")
3. would like to know how's the pacing or maybe wait for the next 8 chapters to know for sure not sure when first dungeon chapters are done in isekai's (thinking about uploading in 8 chapter intervals maybe 4 because i find myself rushing to upload a chapter on time when I was uploading the initial 8.)
4. Also does the Illustrations help visualize some of the scenes?
5. Punctuation/Grammar
6. Tips to help with writing fight scenes ( I think I struggle with not making it drawn out enough as it can be/cool)
thank you for taking the time to read my post. will do my best to reply.
-Saku
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/994407/my-eternal-afterlife/
Last edited: