Feedback thread from me.

[Slays_The_Crusader]

Sure, would love to hear your thoughts on The Desolate Blade.

Pretty good overall, First Chapter (P.0) does a pretty good job at establishing the dark tone, and the world that your book takes place in.
Some things feel just a tad over described, though that's just a personal taste of mine.
Not personally a fan of dark fantasy books, but someone who's into that sort of thing should have a good time with your book.

 

[Para23]

Care to take a look at this? (If you’ve got the time)

Scripted Fate

The off rhythm tick of a clock, and the acidic smell of blood. A lifeless body, and a letter, blood seeping into the floor of an inn I had no memory of. And a revolver, clutched in my own hand. In an age of churning gears and steam engines that...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Bobple]

You know what, never actually used one these before. Don't really need feedback, but I should try it at least once!
So here you go.
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/708408/triifficsoul-can-i-be-in-control/

(Not expecting anything really, just a yeah it's alright, good, or bad is fine for me)

 

[CrimsonGenius]

Power of the Elements: Recharge

Jake Ishida expected ordinary days when he moved to a new city. He did not expect the mysterious warrior, Pilot, to give him a strange crystal. The crystal transforms him into the Fire Radiant, a warrior of order. Now, he must learn how to utilize his new powers to fight...

www.scribblehub.com

If you want.

 

[Jaymi]

if ur still doing this, do u wanna try out my story?

Girlguide: A Girl’s Guide To Writing Female Characters!

Kai, an aspiring light novel author, has always had his path to success hindered by his inability to write female characters. However, everything changes when he wakes up one day as a young girl. This change becomes his chance to gain a deeper understanding of women, hoping to take his...

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[yinjenxie]

Is this still open? Hope you try mine out.

Planet Breaker

The Universe holds many dark and untold secrets. Secrets that the conscious mind had longed searching in places. A star that has fallen into a mystery-filled planet. Leading him to the heritage of his very existence. Technology. Power. Hegemony. Truth. All the wonders, the dreams of every common...

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[Gunshot_god]

Yo here is my second chapter of the story.

The Deformed Star In the Sky - Flashback to a starry sky | Scribble Hub

www.scribblehub.com

(My first chapter is not good. But I appreciate if u read that. Only 2 chapters so far. I need some reviews to bring back my inspiration. Thanks for your help).

 

[Kamelingil]

I recently made my series on Hiatus to edit all the mistakes I made at the first 20 chapters. But it will be interesting though

LEGENDARY: The Omnipotence

(This novel is currently under rewrite) Infinite stories unfolds as the creation of the Fiction Verse and evolves into something revolutionary. This series is an All-in-one Genre, everything can happen, even the things you've dreamed of, even the stories that never existed before, it will...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Tricky786]

Hi, so I want to rewrite my story and need some feed back. I am an ESL so you may find grammar mistakes on the way. But still check out my story "The Barriard"

The Barriard

It has been a decade since the Great Calamity shook the whole world and reduced civilization to shambles. In this rebuilt world, Ric is a ruthless orphan with a mysterious past, who seeks strength through violence. His friend Yota, warm-hearted and forgiving, aspires to be a hero. Together they...

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And on royal road too, if you want.

The Barriard | Royal Road

It has been a decade since the Great Calamity shook the whole world and reduced civilization to shambles. In this rebuilt world, Ric is a ruthless orphan with a mysterious past, who seeks strength through violence. His friend Yota, warm-hearted and forgiving, aspires to be a hero. Together they...

www.royalroad.com

 

[Darkodia]

Take a look at mine, please:
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/879300/sanctuary-compromised-a-zombie-apocalypse-tale/

 

[anthony59237]

Hey, thanks so much for the offer. Link below to my story:

The Fam [Dark Comedy/Urban Fantasy]

In a world filled with elves, ogres, and humans coexisting amongst each other in a modern society, Cindy, a half-elf, has been faced with discrimination since the day she was born. When she moves to the City of Baldimore to become an Ubear driver, her world view is suddenly changed,...

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[FIAMMA01]

I'm doing my own feedback thread now, mainly cause I wanna read and review more stuff around here.
You don't gotta interact any of my stuff in return, but it would be appreciated if you did.
I'll read the first few chapters of your book and tell you what I think of it.

My qualifications:
I can read.
Pretty much nothing else.

What I will do:
Read the first few chapters of your book.
Tell you what I think of it, not in a "How well would this sell" way, but in a "How much I liked reading it way,"
I'll give you whatever feedback I can, though maybe take it with a bit of a grain of salt considering by only writing knowledge comes from YouTube videos and the fact that I got an B in 10th grade English.

Hello, I've got a book here called Kinshura-It's not a LitRPG, so I'd really appreciate any amount of feedback I can get. Currently it's got 22 chapters and has a high focus on action/adventure, but there's a bit of comedy sprinkled in there too. So in other words its a high fantasy without the isekai part. I'd like to hear your thoughts if you ever get to this. Kinshura - Scribblehub

 

[Numero]

Can you please give me some thought?

Transforming the Word

Zenon's life changed when he came across a fortunate accident that changed his life for better or worse. He obtained an Ancient Magic so unique that it required the combination of two different, yet at the same time suitable entities. Magic and Science...

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[Kinni]

I would like to ask for some feedback on my story.
Ascendance of the Big Sister Monster Tamer

 

[nii07]

Do you mind checking out two of mine?

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/843745/my-goddess-mother-gave-me-a-system-and-kicked-me-out/

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/843715/bleach-gazing-mirage/

 

[aimless]

I'm doing my own feedback thread now, mainly cause I wanna read and review more stuff around here.
You don't gotta interact any of my stuff in return, but it would be appreciated if you did.
I'll read the first few chapters of your book and tell you what I think of it.

My qualifications:
I can read.
Pretty much nothing else.

What I will do:
Read the first few chapters of your book.
Tell you what I think of it, not in a "How well would this sell" way, but in a "How much I liked reading it way,"
I'll give you whatever feedback I can, though maybe take it with a bit of a grain of salt considering by only writing knowledge comes from YouTube videos and the fact that I got an B in 10th grade English.

I just posted one chapter for now but would you say it’s a good introduction or not? https://www.scribblehub.com/read/907534-the-perfect-ending/chapter/907609/