Brutally and honestly speaking, the ammount of errors on just the first chapter is abysmal. If you wish to 'earn money' through writing, editing will be worthwhile.
No matter how bad something is, it can always be improved.
Stocking chapters to actually open a patreon would be the second step.
The idea itself is common ground at this point. Some will say, 'just another basic reincarnation/isekai/litrpg idea.' While others who enjoy the genre will stick to it.
My personal opinion, add a twist or two more to the plot and it'll do well.
