TunaDealer
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Hello,
It has been a long time since I last wrote parts of a novel or similiar things. So I wanted to ask for some feedback on my content, in terms of pacing.
So far only chapter 1 and 2 are published while I am sitting on the draft for chapter 3. I would like to see if I still have it in me to produce content that some people may enjoy. Even if it is only one or two people. I hope I can bring a good or at least decent story, which would serve as a baseline for a Visual Novel I am planning to make. Thus any help is greatly appreciated.
For the feedback I would love stuff like pacing, if I have done a good job with the amount of dialogue, compared to descriptive texts and similiar stuff. I will probably have to put more world building/explanatory/descriptive things into it, but I think I can do that.
Link to the work: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/632138/lyraen--bloody-age/
It has been a long time since I last wrote parts of a novel or similiar things. So I wanted to ask for some feedback on my content, in terms of pacing.
So far only chapter 1 and 2 are published while I am sitting on the draft for chapter 3. I would like to see if I still have it in me to produce content that some people may enjoy. Even if it is only one or two people. I hope I can bring a good or at least decent story, which would serve as a baseline for a Visual Novel I am planning to make. Thus any help is greatly appreciated.
For the feedback I would love stuff like pacing, if I have done a good job with the amount of dialogue, compared to descriptive texts and similiar stuff. I will probably have to put more world building/explanatory/descriptive things into it, but I think I can do that.
Link to the work: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/632138/lyraen--bloody-age/
