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Note, I just want advice, since I am starting a new novel today. This is under no circumstances an add for a story or anything. Just bouncing ideas off you all.
Ok, I know this is done before (even by me), but how does this sound to you:
1. Weak F ranked Adventurer joins a party. But they are all F ranked.
@NineHeadHeavenDevouringSerpent pointed out they were having it too easy. Lack of depth. The comedic undertones are a must. Not everyone can find it in themselves to laugh when their world goes to the shitter, despite their best efforts. That would show the strong character of the characters.
Edit>First loss, F rank instead of D and above rank.
2. They need to do quests to advance, but no one wants to give them more than house sitting, so they get jobs at various businesses around town. You know, to make ends meet.
@TsumiHokiro made some good points about the inconsistency with how the quests are handed out. Possible hints I can add to make sure the readers understand:
Edit>So F rank-House sitting, dog walking, still trainees for the most part in all but name. Then, when the members get to D rank, they can party with someone from a higher rank, who will take them on D level quests> goblin extermination, dungeon harvesting. From then on, they are full members.
3. They save up all their money to get into time rooms (Basically a place where 10 hours inside are 1 second in the real world.)
Second loss: One of the members can't afford to pitch in. Wants to leave, but the party works extra hard. They get mocked, since they are the only F ranked party in the guild.
4. They struggle because time rooms are very expensive, and have to live off PJ sandwiches.
Edit>Third loss: Show that they are experiencing hunger pains. Make sure that one or more of them losses their rented room. Make them live in the forest by a stream if you have to, but put them through a grinder and make them close.
5. ( I go to great length to develop their friendship and romances)
Edit>Mocking by guild members intensifies. Make it so that it is not because the guild members are a*holes, but because the guild is competitive, and the country has inflation.
6. They are finally allowed to retake the entrance test, but one of them doesn't pass, since he is fat. (But only because of that. He is a good alchemist, and can brew potions like no other. Also, he can run short distances. (Yes, it is the MC))
7. The party says to hell with the guild, and then they become freelance adventurers. (The taxes they had to pay as part of the guild ate up like 50% of their income.)
Edit: @So_Indecisive pointed out that they will have troubles getting quests.
Possible solution: Bounty hunting and illegal dungeon delving. Herb collecting for potions, animal harvesting for rare materials. Maybe some odd jobs here and there on farms. (Show desperate struggle!!!!)
Edit>Add in some hungry nights in the rain/snow/desert/dungeon if you have to! Make sure that at least one of them thinks about quitting, but let it not be the MC. Screen time for everyone!!!!!
8. Traveling through the world ensures, many quests are done, the fat MC losses all the weight because he has to walk like 12 hours per day. (And as someone who lost 4 kg in three weeks just from walking and a strict regime of no snacking between meals, I can say it is possible.)
Edit>Potential loss> They get stuck in a town working a day job, and the MC gains back some of his weight. Make him go closer to ML. Make the party huddle up. Have them save the town they are in because there is no one else there. They MAKE themselves a name that way.
9. A sickness strikes their Hometown. The guild master of the guild asks the MC to find a cure.
10. MC is under pressure, but he helps the people. Then he refuses to take money, and instead he makes it clear, that the money should be given to the people who remain in the hometown.
11. His ML love interest proposes him marriage. All the others want a shared wedding.
12. Happy End Point. Last POV MC.
So, do you think it would be enough for something that is book length? Note, these are the key plot points, and not an outline of every chapter.
Thank you for your help! =)
Ok, I know this is done before (even by me), but how does this sound to you:
1. Weak F ranked Adventurer joins a party. But they are all F ranked.
@NineHeadHeavenDevouringSerpent pointed out they were having it too easy. Lack of depth. The comedic undertones are a must. Not everyone can find it in themselves to laugh when their world goes to the shitter, despite their best efforts. That would show the strong character of the characters.
Edit>First loss, F rank instead of D and above rank.
2. They need to do quests to advance, but no one wants to give them more than house sitting, so they get jobs at various businesses around town. You know, to make ends meet.
@TsumiHokiro made some good points about the inconsistency with how the quests are handed out. Possible hints I can add to make sure the readers understand:
Edit>So F rank-House sitting, dog walking, still trainees for the most part in all but name. Then, when the members get to D rank, they can party with someone from a higher rank, who will take them on D level quests> goblin extermination, dungeon harvesting. From then on, they are full members.
3. They save up all their money to get into time rooms (Basically a place where 10 hours inside are 1 second in the real world.)
Second loss: One of the members can't afford to pitch in. Wants to leave, but the party works extra hard. They get mocked, since they are the only F ranked party in the guild.
4. They struggle because time rooms are very expensive, and have to live off PJ sandwiches.
Edit>Third loss: Show that they are experiencing hunger pains. Make sure that one or more of them losses their rented room. Make them live in the forest by a stream if you have to, but put them through a grinder and make them close.
5. ( I go to great length to develop their friendship and romances)
Edit>Mocking by guild members intensifies. Make it so that it is not because the guild members are a*holes, but because the guild is competitive, and the country has inflation.
6. They are finally allowed to retake the entrance test, but one of them doesn't pass, since he is fat. (But only because of that. He is a good alchemist, and can brew potions like no other. Also, he can run short distances. (Yes, it is the MC))
7. The party says to hell with the guild, and then they become freelance adventurers. (The taxes they had to pay as part of the guild ate up like 50% of their income.)
Edit: @So_Indecisive pointed out that they will have troubles getting quests.
Possible solution: Bounty hunting and illegal dungeon delving. Herb collecting for potions, animal harvesting for rare materials. Maybe some odd jobs here and there on farms. (Show desperate struggle!!!!)
Edit>Add in some hungry nights in the rain/snow/desert/dungeon if you have to! Make sure that at least one of them thinks about quitting, but let it not be the MC. Screen time for everyone!!!!!
8. Traveling through the world ensures, many quests are done, the fat MC losses all the weight because he has to walk like 12 hours per day. (And as someone who lost 4 kg in three weeks just from walking and a strict regime of no snacking between meals, I can say it is possible.)
Edit>Potential loss> They get stuck in a town working a day job, and the MC gains back some of his weight. Make him go closer to ML. Make the party huddle up. Have them save the town they are in because there is no one else there. They MAKE themselves a name that way.
9. A sickness strikes their Hometown. The guild master of the guild asks the MC to find a cure.
10. MC is under pressure, but he helps the people. Then he refuses to take money, and instead he makes it clear, that the money should be given to the people who remain in the hometown.
11. His ML love interest proposes him marriage. All the others want a shared wedding.
12. Happy End Point. Last POV MC.
So, do you think it would be enough for something that is book length? Note, these are the key plot points, and not an outline of every chapter.
Thank you for your help! =)
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