TotallyHuman
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there's going to be a character (me. It's gonna be me) that will act out cartoonish scenes, like hearts jumping out of her eyesockets, jaws dropping dramatically, having an unnaturally plastic body, transforming into different personas etc.
I want to describe those scenes in a way that makes it clear that 1) it really happened 2) it doesn't make sense for it to happen because it's real life not a cartoon, 3) flows smoothly and 4) is meant to be comedic but very on the nose
Examples attached:
which is the best I could find with a search engine.
Here're examples of what I want:
I want to describe those scenes in a way that makes it clear that 1) it really happened 2) it doesn't make sense for it to happen because it's real life not a cartoon, 3) flows smoothly and 4) is meant to be comedic but very on the nose
Examples attached:
Here're examples of what I want:
As the wolf pounced on Melody, Melody caught it midair and threw the beast over her shoulder, causing the Great Witch that was watching the show to open her mouth in surprise... and continue to open it until her jaw hit the floor and her tongue rolled out of the open cavity like a red carpet.
Melody then proceded to pummel the poor wolf with her bare hands, her onslaught of hits both brutal and efficient. Just as the Great Witch was about finished stuffing her 3 meter tongue back into her mouth, Melody performed a German suplex on the wolf, the unexpected move causing the eyes of the Great Witch to pop out of her sockets like 2 white glossy cylinders.
I am not really satisfied with these because I was going for the reactions feeling obnixious and either mocking or very on the nose and right now they just feel gimmicky. Also, they are way too long and probably distract the reader."Can you do it for me, oh Great Witch?"
"Of course, child, who do you think this great witch is?", as if to prove a point, the dimunitive witch-shaped figure flexed its bicep, causing it to rapidly baloon, grow a bicep of its own and take a bodybuilding pose
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