I may have some writing advice.

[georgelee5786]

is wanting a race to learn to stand on its own two legs a good reason for the immortal first emperor to disappear and watch his race from the sidelines?

 

[Fox-Trot-9]

Butt in chair, hands over keyboard, start typing.

 

[A2Remedy]

One of the things you could do to diversify them is to give them their own personal voice.

Character one is green, okay. Character two is blue.

When writing for character two you could have him be more snappy, both when he speaks and when writing for his thoughts and what he's doing.

While character one is a lot more understanding, kind, and thoughtful.

Also try to stick to one main viewpoint per chapter.

Will do! Thanks for the advice!

 

[Nekroz]

Will do! Thanks for the advice!

Thank the one who sent me!
And if you need anymore advice feel free to ask.