Your synopsis:
A slice of life series set in 19th century england. Follows the daily life of Eleanor and her family as they work hard to stay afloat and get out of poverty in the West Midlands city of Gravenbirch. Along the way, she will meet many quirky characters and embark on various adventures!
SeaHiatus, thanks for bringing the synopsis!
@Kinnikuniverse
The synopsis is pretty cliche on its own accord, maybe just because I've seen too much of the opening statement. It is also pretty short, and plainly boring. There is no way anyone is going to read it just because it said that Eleanor and her family are in trouble or because she will meet many characters with different idiosyncrasies while embarking on different entertaining adventures!
Written things like that just don't cut it.
'A slice-of-life series set in 19th century England. '
> First of all, when you're writing a name (Martha), place (England), and the 'I' personal pronouns - you have to make sure that the beginning of its alphabet is on a letter case - the same as how you wrote the Midlands City of GravenBirch, though I don't know why the C from City is not letter cased.
'Follows the daily life of Elanor'
> This starting word after the opening sentence is clearly a distaste when read, and you shouldn't do this, especially when you know what you're doing. Consider avoiding words that start at the beginning without a pronoun supporting them, but while some others do this - they actually know what they're doing!
Improvised:
'This story follows the daily life of Eleanor and her family as they struggle to persevere the poverty crisis in the West Midlands City of Gravenbirch.'
'Along the way, she will meet many quirky characters and embark on various adventures!'
> Missing Ingredients on Tempting Readers
You have to make your synopsis enticing to the readers' mouths, hooking them in the process, as they become in love with your novel!
For example,
"Along with her endeavour on a journey set-in-stone, she meets the long-lost forgotten myth - a grand pirate - named Blueblanc. Enticed by his sweet words, together, they went on an adventure to find the treasures hidden by the very world they live in. And so thus, as they travel around the world, they will encounter different allies that will support them on their grand journey and foes that will become a hindrance to their way."
Compared this to:
"Along the way, she will meet many quirky characters and embark on various adventures!"
*The readers would gladly choose my example.*
> Comparing Synopsis
Please understand that the improvised synopsis I created has nothing to do with your story! Like the pirate part, I just made them for a good reason.
My Improvised Synopsis of Yours:
"A slice-of-life set in 19th-century England. This story follows the daily life of Eleanor and her family as they struggle to persevere the poverty crisis in the West Midlands City of Gravenbirch. Along with her endeavour on a journey set-in-stone, she meets the long-lost forgotten myth - a grand pirate - named Blueblanc. Enticed by his sweet words, together, they went on an adventure to find the treasures hidden by the very world they live in. And so thus, as they travel around the world, they will encounter different allies that will support them on their grand journey and foes that will become a hindrance to their way."
Your Synopsis:
"A slice of life series set in 19th century england. Follows the daily life of Eleanor and her family as they work hard to stay afloat and get out of poverty in the West Midlands city of Gravenbirch. Along the way, she will meet many quirky characters and embark on various adventures!"
3/10! It is disgusting!!
But don't be discouraged by my very harsh words, they are merely words that tries to strengthen your resolve and if it doesn't, then you're free to give up. A writer is like a warrior, once you've set up on what you want, giving up is not an option. If you ever feel like you can't do it anymore, know that we are here to help you and guide you! You have potential, remember that.
> Grammatical Errors - There are no dire or critical grammatical errors, yet it has em/en dash and pronoun incorrect usages or rather, unused!
> Em dash - An em dash is used to emphasize the thought, to abrupt the dialogue, and indicate a pause in a sentence.
For example,
'I—no, we will defeat you!'
> En dash - An en dash is a mid-sized dash (longer than a hyphen but shorter than an em dash) that is mostly used to show ranges in numbers and dates.
For example,
'19th-century... 2020-2021'
Use them well!
