Need feedback, pls

[PBJ_Time]

Since these past few months, I've been dabbling on several isekai ideas, but this one motivated enough me the most. I'm not trying to write anything original. It's just a story I've had the most fun writing in a while.

Crimson Purple

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Also, please forgive me if the formatting is quite difficult to look at. I was gonna upload this as a PDF, but as I've said many times already, it still needs work. I'll be editing this draft as we speak. Thank you.