Shaky
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I am writing a fanfic about cyberpunk 2077 from the perspective of a Neo-Soviet AI going rogue/malfunctioning in America.
I would love feedback on everything: The intro description (it seems wonky but I don't know how), grammar (I think I have a habit of repeating words+the eternal mistake of witch/which or limp/limb that I constantly miss. Also sentences that might run too long) and the descriptions of sounds and effects in the story (I default usually to just *EFFECT!* posting). And anything else that might catch your eye for improvement. And of course, if you know Cyberpunk lore that I might have erred against or could do integrating, please let me know.
As an Eastern Euro, I have contact with Russian culture, but I am just an outside observer trying to write a character of a culture of a fictional USSR that continued into the future 2077 era. Any Russian cultural memes, phrases, iconic symbols or simply better shouts and slogans are welcome. I think I might have Flanderized the MC a bit too much with him starting off his adventure by placing a crate of vodka before a group of tracksuit wearing slavic gangsters as thanks for getting directions, but I hope to improve moving forward.
And of course, the fic is here. Thank you for reading so far.
I would love feedback on everything: The intro description (it seems wonky but I don't know how), grammar (I think I have a habit of repeating words+the eternal mistake of witch/which or limp/limb that I constantly miss. Also sentences that might run too long) and the descriptions of sounds and effects in the story (I default usually to just *EFFECT!* posting). And anything else that might catch your eye for improvement. And of course, if you know Cyberpunk lore that I might have erred against or could do integrating, please let me know.
As an Eastern Euro, I have contact with Russian culture, but I am just an outside observer trying to write a character of a culture of a fictional USSR that continued into the future 2077 era. Any Russian cultural memes, phrases, iconic symbols or simply better shouts and slogans are welcome. I think I might have Flanderized the MC a bit too much with him starting off his adventure by placing a crate of vodka before a group of tracksuit wearing slavic gangsters as thanks for getting directions, but I hope to improve moving forward.
And of course, the fic is here. Thank you for reading so far.