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[Slays_The_Crusader]

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Chapter 2, Review

WARNING, DO NOT READ IF YOU HAVE PURE HEART OF A MAIDEN. YOU CAN SKIP TO CLICK SCORECARD BELOW.
I will write whatever comes in my mind first while reading along.


Mercology? Sounds like the degree I hold, utterly useless irl.

Pocket : "hey, I was using that..."

My favourite pastime in last summer.

Sigh + angry with er sound.

Fucking + cool.

Can't say the same about my irl degree.

I'll be the judge of that

Vitra*

Da Team...

The rando gonna die ~

His uncle must be some politician or he is the person who always keep a creepy smile.

Why is she behaving more like a Texas oil businessmen than a merc.

The task

Tell me again, Why did I hired him? What do you think battlefield is.... Close combat should be first thing they should teach u in merchology*

No it doesn't. You have anti material gun but no access to a good translator device or someone more capable.

Ye murica! Hell ya.


No what how could she buy that excuse.... Chirag jedi powers.
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Sighs.
I will continue the review for ch 2 once I get enough time, the chapter is too long and my browser keep crashing,
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Nutshell --- "Robbing Egyptian musketeers with American made anti material guns to avoid paying tax."

Lol, thank, I will keep this in mind.
You've actually mimicked Cinema Sins back when Cinema Sins was good pretty well, lol.

 

[SummerSweetTea]

Gemstone Princess: The Rise of Amalia

Gemstone Princess: The Rise of Amalia is a magical adventure that takes Amalia from the non-magical world of Elca to the magical Lita. When a dark curse crosses the boundaries between worlds and impacts Amalia's village, she learns that the curse is looking for her. The only way to stop...

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Genre: Fantasy/Romance/Drama/Adventure

I'm mostly looking for general feedback, if it's enjoyable and anywhere that is lacking/slow/boring.

 

[fantasyretreat]

This is the most entertaining review I’ve read on here All hail the Raymann that did the math!

Took the words right outta my mouth!

Here's my story. It's new though, so please go easy on me.

Dark One [A Progression Fantasy]

Dark One is set in the kingdom of Vorthe, a land that has earned its peace and stability as a result of the efforts and sacrifices of past heroes. But alas, calamity draws near! A being of unearthly hunger for chaos and destruction, which leaves ghost cities in its wake —...

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[Para23]

Welcome to the feedback thread of the newbie who got here just before you.
also known as
Rayman's free feedback thread

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Do You know Mario.... Do You know Sonic.... Do You know Zelda...
Form Where do you think they got their feedback?
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steps to ask for feedback

Post the web novel link and a short description of the genre. And write, what you specifically need feedback on (title, synopsis, chapters, user comments, your neighbour', etc.).

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What I won't give feedback on

Stories I won't read:

1.) A story that its author himself cannot read.
2.) Story that is more than 2k words per chapter on average, bruh... I have a good life here, don't want to get transmigrated while reading.
3.) Anything that doesn't involve non-consent in sexual acts or stories that objectify Mine-Workers in any sexual manner.
4.) Even smut must have some standards. Your character should be breathing with the plot.
5.) Am I missing something??
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How would I score the feedback
I would perform a long mathematical calculation to determine the exact value to be attached to your creation.
Each Scoring would consist of 5 of these.
--- how much I liked it
---- how much appeal it has to the general audience uhm... I mean readers
---- how much has Coolness plus freshness.
--- how much you bribed by comments, likes on my novels or posts, or plain buttering me up, give the feedback score.
---Overall sins (ya.. I know..I am straight up copying cinema sins yt now.) [+1 for magic novels]
--- only for smut tag.
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final word before I send you to fetch the quest
"Feedback is Feedback, it's not your grandfather's will. No need to take it seriously"
and
"You will always get 5/5 full stars form me on main site."

I'm ready to get roasted
My novel is a mystery set in a steampunkish setting, except it's Japan, and no one is actually human. Take from that what you will.

Scripted Fate

The off rhythm tick of a clock, and the acidic smell of blood. A lifeless body, and a letter, blood seeping into the floor of an inn I had no memory of. And a revolver, clutched in my own hand. In an age of churning gears and steam engines that...

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[Kamelingil]

This is my first novel and I've never read novels before writing this story, but I can assure you that the further you read, the better it gets

LEGENDARY: The Omnipotence

(This novel is currently under rewrite) Infinite stories unfolds as the creation of the Fiction Verse and evolves into something revolutionary. This series is an All-in-one Genre, everything can happen, even the things you've dreamed of, even the stories that never existed before, it will...

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[Alfir]

Heyo~! Please check my 'How to Cultivate a Game'. It was in my signature.

 

[trophymade]

Welcome to the feedback thread of the newbie who got here just before you.
also known as
Rayman's free feedback thread

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"Believe me when I say, I am a true professional here. I ain't no normal reviewer. Giving feedback runs in my veins. Whether it is feedback about how ugly my neighbour's child looks or any web novel written by some random person on the internet, I perform my duty with utmost sincerity.

Do You know Mario.... Do You know Sonic.... Do You know Zelda...
Form Where do you think they got their feedback?
Me neither, but I can say one thing for sure that here, you will receive feedback that you will never forget."

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steps to ask for feedback

Post the web novel link and a short description of the genre. And write, what you specifically need feedback on (title, synopsis, chapters, user comments, your neighbour', etc.).

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What I won't give feedback on

Stories I won't read:

1.) A story that its author himself cannot read.
2.) Story that is more than 2k words per chapter on average, bruh... I have a good life here, don't want to get transmigrated while reading.
3.) Anything that doesn't involve non-consent in sexual acts or stories that objectify Mine-Workers in any sexual manner.
4.) Even smut must have some standards. Your character should be breathing with the plot.
5.) Am I missing something??
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How would I score the feedback
I would perform a long mathematical calculation to determine the exact value to be attached to your creation.
Each Scoring would consist of 5 of these.
--- how much I liked it
---- how much appeal it has to the general audience uhm... I mean readers
---- how much has Coolness plus freshness.
--- how much you bribed by comments, likes on my novels or posts, or plain buttering me up, give the feedback score.
---Overall sins (ya.. I know..I am straight up copying cinema sins yt now.) [+1 for magic novels]
--- only for smut tag.
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final word before I send you to fetch the quest
"Feedback is Feedback, it's not your grandfather's will. No need to take it seriously"
and
"You will always get 5/5 full stars form me on main site."

The Sky’s Ruler

*** In the enigmatic realm of Thän’zar a world saturated with ancient magic and fractured by enigmatic, divided races, an insatiable desire unites its inhabitants—an overpowering, all-consuming craving that casts an ever-present shroud of suspense and intrigue over the land. Power. At the age...

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Genre: Fantasy, a mix of mythology and magic.

I nee feedback on pacing.

My chapters are only 3, and are around 1.3-6k words.

 

[Jaymi]

sounds fun!
Review to ur heart's content

Girlguide: A Girl’s Guide To Writing Female Characters!

Kai, an aspiring light novel author, has always had his path to success hindered by his inability to write female characters. However, everything changes when he wakes up one day as a young girl. This change becomes his chance to gain a deeper understanding of women, hoping to take his...

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My avg chapter length is like 1.6k, as for the genre... It's just cute girls doing cute things.

 

[Gunshot_god]

My story needs some hot oil to burn ‍. Can u please provide a feedback for my 2 chapters.

The Deformed Star In the Sky

What will happen when a famous brain specialist doctor returns to his hometown to look for his ex-boyfriend!? Luo Feng was ruthlessly dumped by his boyfriend Wen Xian and returns gloriously to chase him down. What was the truth that broken them up? Why is Luo Feng chasing the one...

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I appreciate ur help very much.

 

[Darkodia]

Take a look at mine, please:
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/879300/sanctuary-compromised-a-zombie-apocalypse-tale/