SHF High-school Fanfic

MidnightFox

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How does this has anything to do with being Eldritch? It's your own subjective thing to define one only based on marysueing a fight.
I don't see it that way, there's a whole bunch of fairy tales he could have used to develop his power, for reference: Alice in wonderland, Jack and the Beanstalk, Hensel and Gretel etc. And I don't mean in terms of combat, and also he doesn't try to trick ppl into eating his chocolate despite the fact he's considered a villain
 

DannyTheDaikon

| Azure tamer | Harbinger of chaos and soup
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I don't see it that way, there's a whole bunch of fairy tales he could have used to develop his power, for reference: Alice in wonderland, Jack and the Beanstalk, Hensel and Gretel etc. And I don't mean in terms of combat, and also he doesn't try to trick ppl into eating his chocolate despite the fact he's considered a villain
A lot of the issues stem from the fact that chapters are 5000 light years behind forum lore-wise, so it takes some time to properly tie thing together. Also before that there was a lot of establishing characters etc.
 

MatchaChocolate69

What happens when the mirror breaks?
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@DannyTheDaikon
Sneak peek :blob_evil:

"Hehe~ Good daikon~" she responds, taking her hand.

Reasserting her possession, Azure pulls the woman into a passionate embrace.

Their faces are very close.
Their lips almost touch.
Their eyes meet each other's.

Ssemouy blushes witnessing the intimacy of the two women.
Even as silhouette without color, the blush on her cheeks is perceptible.

"You're so cute!" Danny whispers sweetly.

"I'm not cute~" Azure responds mischievously.
 

Voidiris

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I don't see it that way, there's a whole bunch of fairy tales he could have used to develop his power, for reference: Alice in wonderland, Jack and the Beanstalk, Hensel and Gretel etc. And I don't mean in terms of combat, and also he doesn't try to trick ppl into eating his chocolate despite the fact he's considered a villain
Well until now eldritch had concept or ideologies that embodied them.
SRB had monoism and flesh.
Azure had time and causality.
I had perception and basically information.
I don't know what DTD has but yeah.
Maybe search for something your character could embody?
Like history or fiction?
I don't know the full context, so whatever.

Goodnight.
 

TheMonotonePuppet

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Maybe because before Tsuru and Botty made me an winged eye and many said that it was eldritch and the character lore is "I'm what the others perceive". You are more a Chucky Doll than anything else and that's of course it's own kind of horror but that's nothing against the horror of all flesh being one, time, perception and whatever DTD is.
True! I guess most don't consider my puppeteers when thinking about me!
 

MidnightFox

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A lot of the issues stem from the fact that chapters are 5000 light years behind forum lore-wise, so it takes some time to properly tie thing together. Also before that there was a lot of establishing characters etc.
The other thing i wanted to point out is that his alter ego gets a better development personality wise compared to his villain persona
 

Azure_Fog

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Time may or may not exist anymore, or any spatial dimensions beyond the third, for that matter :blob_hmm:
:/
Wait… wrong thread…
I've been suffering from shoulder and back pain the past 3 days. Today I realized we bought standing desks half a year ago precisely to help with that. I simply forgot to change the height.

This Daikon is not the sharpest tool in the shed :blob_uwu:

*pulls out whetstone*
Danny, you’re getting sharpened.
Brainfuck? At least that one's meant to be understandable by the human mind
I will do you one better:
*dies*
*walks in*

Alright, that's enough SHF for today ♪~ ᕕ(ᐛ)ᕗ
*hastily walks out*
*grabs*
No escape~
*Grabs you on the collar.*

If you run away like that, gurl. I'm sorry but I must sus you out.
*stabs*
Hands. Off. Danny.
*slashes through you, destroying 10^12 multiverses in the process*
*you completely cease to exist in all timelines and multiverses*
*you never existed, will exist, or have existed*
FUCK YOUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU
Skill issue~
:o
*hug tackles*
Good job~
*rubs ears*

*stabs*
... You remember that our extended family includes Luoir and Orlui because of my actions? :blob_blank:
And I disowned Luoir~
Only 3 ppl in the chart are eldritch You Voidiris and Azure, Danny counts as a goddess so she's not eldritch, Ssemouy as far as I'm aware isn't eldritch either and neither is Matcha and no having tentacles doesn't make you eldritch
Danny is Eldritch~ I ate her too many times~
Sorta same, but no one has called me eldritch within the context of the fiction. I think it is because I am not sinister.
Do you consider yourself Eldritch? If you do, I‘ll consider your application~
 

MatchaChocolate69

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I'm being logical not hateful
My reasoning
1) you haven't been featured in that many chapters, and when you appear in chapters it's for comedic purposes
2) all chapters you've written feature you being rejected by girls and dying
3) you have a unique ability yet it's not used in any way throughout the fanfic (hell you could literally go ahead and make your own reality marble (Fate reference) and us it in combat you could even make idk golems out of chocolate)
4) you could have been a great villain in my eyes but what I've mentioned in the clauses above ruins it
Matcha is a third-rate villain, endowed with flawed powers and limited by his psychology full of defects to be suitable for fighting, especially considering who his potential opponents might be. How could he compete with Azure or Midnight, or even Boi? He has tried to use deception, but those who attend the school are on average smarter than him. The only positive trait he has is never giving up, and this has led him to achieve some results. Besides this, he has a big heart that has allowed him to endear himself to beings more powerful than him, improving his social situation.
The other thing i wanted to point out is that his alter ego gets a better development personality wise compared to his villain persona
The alter ego is the opposite of Matcha, meaning that it improves his combat abilities but becomes colder and unemotional. They are two different characters, one the mirror of the other. One could say that Matcha is a good Villain and the alter ego is an evil Hero, although that would be a superficial view.
 

DannyTheDaikon

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@MatchaChocolate69 I get it now... I'm gonna frame this :blob_aww:

@DannyTheDaikon
Sneak peek :blob_evil:

"Hehe~ Good daikon~" she responds, taking her hand.

Reasserting her possession, Azure pulls the woman into a passionate embrace.

Their faces are very close.
Their lips almost touch.
Their eyes meet each other's.

Ssemouy blushes witnessing the intimacy of the two women.
Even as silhouette without color, the blush on her cheeks is perceptible.

"You're so cute!" Danny whispers sweetly.

"I'm not cute~" Azure responds mischievously.


The other thing i wanted to point out is that his alter ego gets a better development personality wise compared to his villain persona
I think you're expecting a bit too much development for how many people we have in the fic.
 

Stealthy_Enigma

(❀⁠≽ᆺ≼)⊃~~~~✧ ꧁Floofy Ninja!!!꧂
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Well until now eldritch had concept or ideologies that embodied them.
SRB had monoism and flesh.
Azure had time and causality.
I had perception and basically information.
I don't know what DTD has but yeah.
Maybe search for something your character could embody?
Like history or fiction?
I don't know the full context, so whatever.

Goodnight.
˝/\⁠⁠__/\˝
(⁠⁠⁠❀≧ᆺ≦)˝∩˝ Sleep well~
 

DannyTheDaikon

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:/
Wait… wrong thread…
:blobrofl:

*pulls out whetstone*
Danny, you’re getting sharpened.
...
my gf said the same thing...
Maybe you want to borrow that daikon sharpener from AYM :blob_hmm:
*revives*
No dying on my watch :blob_uwu:
*grabs*
No escape~
*turns around and launches self at you*
If it from Your Stabbyness then never :blob_uwu:
*stabs*
Hands. Off. Danny.
*slashes through you, destroying 10^12 multiverses in the process*
*you completely cease to exist in all timelines and multiverses*
*you never existed, will exist, or have existed*
:blob_evil: :blob_uwu:
:o
*hug tackles*
Good job~
*rubs ears*
:blob_aww: You like it? :blob_melt: Eheheh~ I made sure to fulfill your request :blob_uwu: :blob_melt:
*nuzzles in while purring*
Danny is Eldritch~ I ate her too many times~
ehehehehe~ :blob_melt: And you will still eat me many more times Your Stabbyness :blob_melt:

Good mo--afternoon? :blob_hmm:
 

Azure_Fog

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Stealthy_Enigma

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Well until now eldritch had concept or ideologies that embodied them.
SRB had monoism and flesh.
Azure had time and causality.
I had perception and basically information.
I don't know what DTD has but yeah.
Maybe search for something your character could embody?
Like history or fiction?
I don't know the full context, so whatever.

Goodnight.
˝/\__/\˝💬
(❀>ᆺ<)
/˙˙˙˙˙🫰\ ***contemplates random thought*** What if I took on the concepts of fluffiness and healing? Instead of being called an eldritch abomination, would I be able to become an eldritch adorable??? Is that even possible??? Hmmm... food for thought...
 
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