Bronzeapollo
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Hello and welcome to me shamelessly asking for criticisms of my new story, Meet Luna, my Daughter. It is a simple story with little plot twists and contrivances as it is meant to revolve around the lives of Luna and Aster. I always feel the chapters are missing something, a sentimentality that brings the reader in. So since I feel that way I want to hear from others about what they feel is missing to paint a better picture of what is happening in the story. Any feedback is appreciated. Thank you.
Meet Luna, my Daughter | Scribble Hub
Meet Luna, my Daughter | Scribble Hub