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[Bobple]

Welcome to Bobple's Below Bverage Beedback Bhread! Wait... *Cough*
Welcome to Bobple's Below Average Feedback Thread.​

Anyway, Been meaning to make one of these for a while, but been busy (Which I still am, but ehh, can't push off doing this forever).

What can I offer you!
Nothing!
But I will read your story here, read some amount of chapters and provide feedback!
Now I may be a "writer", but I ain't a good a one and a newbie, so double the trouble! I awful at noticing mistakes and I read so many stories that range from awful to great all the way through.

So yeah, I'm pretty bad at noticing quality, so yeah.

*Cough* If you want extra good feedback, there are many wonderful people with their own Feedback threads who will do a much better job then me.

Also, this my personal opinion. Which yeah, that's it.

How will it Work?
Post story link here and, I'll read some number of chapters, then I'll provide feedback. (Standard stuff)

You can suggest a minimum number of chapters. I won't necessarily listen to that suggestion, but I will take into consideration!

I will say whatever immediately came to my mind. What I like and I didn't like. However, expect this to pretty generic and probably not that helpful.

After you post whatever you want me to check out here, I'll read it!... Eventually.

(UPDATE) - I'll like the request post to say 'I've seen the request, and I will read it.'

I will also give a rating!
= Good (Maybe something holding it down)
= Good (Yeah, I like it)
= Great (This... is really good)
= Great (Why you asking for feedback?)

If you somehow give me something I actually dislike then you get, .

 

[Para23]

Heya! Imma drop mine here, read if you want to! Much appreciated!

Scripted Fate

The off rhythm tick of a clock, and the acidic smell of blood. A lifeless body, and a letter, blood seeping into the floor of an inn I had no memory of. And a revolver, clutched in my own hand. In an age of churning gears and steam engines that...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Bobple]

Heya! Imma drop mine here, read if you want to! Much appreciated!

Scripted Fate

The off rhythm tick of a clock, and the acidic smell of blood. A lifeless body, and a letter, blood seeping into the floor of an inn I had no memory of. And a revolver, clutched in my own hand. In an age of churning gears and steam engines that...

www.scribblehub.com

(Read 3 chapters)
Thoughts
Fun and now it had been added to my reading list!

Umm yeah.

I was intrigued by the first three chapters, obvious a bit confused, but the good kind of confusion! I felt the panic, and yeah I like it.

Besides that, I did want a little more to chew on for the start. Kind of wish there was five chapters to read. A sat down for food, but still hungry. Ain't a complaint on the story though. (Just a heads up, if you ever write a second story some time in the far future, try to have at least 10k words done (So 5 2k chapters, or etc). Just from browsing Scribble & Forums for a while, people tend to read a story more if there is more than 1or2 chapters.)

Yeah overall, I like it. Good, intrigued, not really sure where the story is going to go, but I'm looking forward to reading more.

Rating
(Limited to Good, by lack of chapters.)

 

[Para23]

Thoughts
Fun and now it had been added to my reading list!

Umm yeah.

I was intrigued by the first three chapters, obvious a bit confused, but the good kind of confusion! I felt the panic, and yeah I like it.

Besides that, I did want a little more to chew on for the start. Kind of wish there was five chapters to read. A sat down for food, but still hungry. Ain't a complaint on the story though. (Just a heads up, if you ever write a second story some time in the far future, try to have at least 10k words done (So 5 2k chapters, or etc). Just from browsing Scribble & Forums for a while, people tend to read a story more if there is more than 1or2 chapters.)

Yeah overall, I like it. Good, intrigued, not really sure where the story is going to go, but I'm looking forward to reading more.

Rating
(Limited to Good, by lack of chapters.)

Thanks! I appreciate the feedback! I went for a mystery type setup before I got to the world building so I’m glad you felt the panic and confusion in a good way! I’ll definitely take your advice on writing more very soon, like I’ll start immediately. Also, the story is more fantasy than I let on so I hope you enjoy the ride if you decide to keep reading (sorry for making you wait for chapters btw, university is kinda killing me rn)

 

[Bobple]

university is kinda killing me rn)

Yep... I know that feeling.

Keep up the good work

 

[RyujiSakamata]

Woah! Seeing you having a feedback thread was nice. Btw, I'm just visiting here hehe (no need feedback)

 

[K5Rakitan]

I'd like a one-star review, please and thank you!
I recommend 17 chapters.

Kaiba’s Prostitute

When CEO Seto Kaiba propositions Joan, she expects a one-night stand, but he and his brother keep coming back for more. Now the Kaiba brothers want an heir from her and will pay any price to get it. How do Joan’s husband and boyfriend feel about her new profession?...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Bobple]

I'd like a one-star review, please and thank you!
I recommend 17 chapters.

Kaiba’s Prostitute

When CEO Seto Kaiba propositions Joan, she expects a one-night stand, but he and his brother keep coming back for more. Now the Kaiba brothers want an heir from her and will pay any price to get it. How do Joan’s husband and boyfriend feel about her new profession?...

www.scribblehub.com

Already read it! Can't believe I forgot to give it one star, silly me.

Woah! Seeing you having a feedback thread was nice. Btw, I'm just visiting here hehe (no need feedback)

Thanks for saying hi!
Have fun the with break and good luck with the edits.

 

[soomuu]

Would you be so kind to give me feedback on Reverberation :)

 

[Bobple]

Would you be so kind to give me feedback on Reverberation :)

(Read 12 chapters)
Thoughts
Well, it was a story where stuff happened.

Beside that, overall, it was fun. I was very confused though. Which is common fault for stories with multiple protagonists in different places doing things simultaneously.

But yeah. Like it, but can't say too much on the characters, not really too interested in either of them yet.

Yep, that's all I got. It was a fun short read, but I was left confused, not really sure where the story was going, and my interested wasn't really grabbed. For me it's a "I'll add it to my reading list, and I'll check in down the line to see how it has developed".

Rating

 

[Tempokai]

Newly Awakened Outer God Works as a Truck Driver

Meet Ichiro Yamashita, a 23-year-old ordinary dude who's recently landed a promotion in the Special Inventory Delivery Department of International World Transportation. But little does he know, his life is about to take a bizarre turn after a showdown with a nightmarish shadow creature that's...

www.scribblehub.com

Try out mine

 

[soomuu]

(Read 12 chapters)
Thoughts
Well, it was a story where stuff happened.

Beside that, overall, it was fun. I was very confused though. Which is common fault for stories with multiple protagonists in different places doing things simultaneously.

But yeah. Like it, but can't say too much on the characters, not really too interested in either of them yet.

Yep, that's all I got. It was a fun short read, but I was left confused, not really sure where the story was going, and my interested wasn't really grabbed. For me it's a "I'll add it to my reading list, and I'll check in down the line to see how it has developed".

Rating

Thanks for the feedback :) 10/10!

 

[Bobple]

Newly Awakened Outer God Works as a Truck Driver

Meet Ichiro Yamashita, a 23-year-old ordinary dude who's recently landed a promotion in the Special Inventory Delivery Department of International World Transportation. But little does he know, his life is about to take a bizarre turn after a showdown with a nightmarish shadow creature that's...

www.scribblehub.com

Try out mine

(Read 26 chapters)
Thoughts
That was a lot of fun.

A very chapter by chapter story. These can either be a lot of fun, or honestly just nonsense, and in this case it is the former!

Wasn't too interested in any of the characters, not uninterested either though. That changed slightly, after the 15 mark, I was beginning to warm to the cast (well mc) and was intrigued on where the plot of the story was heading.

Overall, that was a fun leisurely read that I enjoy quiet a lot.

Rating
-> (Between Good or Great, or great, either way, that was a fun read)

 

[AdOtherwise]

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/727045/lowly-ascent/
Please and thank you

 

[Jaymi]

I'd like some feedback! I've only got 5 chapters posted (1.5k word avg) but u can just read up to when u get bored lol. Thanks for doing this btw :D

Girlguide: A Girl’s Guide To Writing Female Characters!

Kai, an aspiring light novel author, has always had his path to success hindered by his inability to write female characters. However, everything changes when he wakes up one day as a young girl. This change becomes his chance to gain a deeper understanding of women, hoping to take his...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[TheMonotonePuppet]

Welcome to Bobple's Below Bverage Beedback Bhread! Wait... *Cough*
Welcome to Bobple's Below Average Feedback Thread.​

Anyway, Been meaning to make one of these for a while, but been busy (Which I still am, but ehh, can't push off doing this forever).

What can I offer you!
Nothing!
But I will read your story here, read some amount of chapters and provide feedback!
Now I may be a "writer", but I ain't a good a one and a newbie, so double the trouble! I awful at noticing mistakes and I read so many stories that range from awful to great all the way through.

So yeah, I'm pretty bad at noticing quality, so yeah.

*Cough* If you want extra good feedback, there are many wonderful people with their own Feedback threads who will do a much better job then me.

Also, this my personal opinion. Which yeah, that's it.

How will it Work?
Post story link here and, I'll read some number of chapters, then I'll provide feedback. (Standard stuff)

You can suggest a minimum number of chapters. I won't necessarily listen to that suggestion, but I will take into consideration!

I will say whatever immediately came to my mind. What I like and I didn't like. However, expect this to pretty generic and probably not that helpful.

After you post whatever you want me to check out here, I'll read it!... Eventually.

(UPDATE) - I'll like the request post to say 'I've seen the request, and I will read it.'

I will also give a rating!
= Good (Maybe something holding it down)
= Good (Yeah, I like it)
= Great (This... is really good)
= Great (Why you asking for feedback?)

If you somehow give me something I actually dislike then you get, .

Can I please have feedback on my story "Charisma" please!

Charisma

I, the wholly happy-go-lucky character, go through life on an alternate Earth with some 'minor' differences. Yes indeedy do! I promise an absolutely joyous time! I tell no lies. What minor differences you ask? Well, here's some advice. Don't drink that lava in a bottle, or you'll spend a night...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Bobple]

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/727045/lowly-ascent/
Please and thank you

(Read 115 chapters) (Volume 1)
Thoughts
The start (first 10 chapters) was fun enough, and made me a little interested in the world.
After that, I didn't care too much about to the story? Umm, not that is was bad or anything, just lost some interest after that. After the prologue some of that interest was regained, mostly cause of the status quo reset, but ehh. However, during the latter parts of my read (60+) I began to enjoy reading it more and more. And by the end I was really liking it.

Overall, throughout the story I liked it, but because there was a lot to read, and because I wasn't overly invested, I did feel like taking a break a couple times.

You probably heard this before, but the power system is neat.

But yeah, as usually with my feedback, not much else to add besides to say "I like it".

Rating

I'd like some feedback! I've only got 5 chapters posted (1.5k word avg) but u can just read up to when u get bored lol. Thanks for doing this btw :D

Girlguide: A Girl’s Guide To Writing Female Characters!

Kai, an aspiring light novel author, has always had his path to success hindered by his inability to write female characters. However, everything changes when he wakes up one day as a young girl. This change becomes his chance to gain a deeper understanding of women, hoping to take his...

www.scribblehub.com

(Read 5 chapters)
Thoughts

A good fun short read.

Characters aren't too complex, and it seems to be setting up a nice and simple fluff and fun type of story.

The first five chapters were good, looking forward to more.

Rating

 

[Jaymi]

(Read 115 chapters) (Volume 1)
Thoughts
The start (first 10 chapters) was fun enough, and made me a little interested in the world.
After that, I didn't care too much about to the story? Umm, not that is was bad or anything, just lost some interest after that. After the prologue some of that interest was regained, mostly cause of the status quo reset, but ehh. However, during the latter parts of my read (60+) I began to enjoy reading it more and more. And by the end I was really liking it.

Overall, throughout the story I liked it, but because there was a lot to read, and because I wasn't overly invested, I did feel like taking a break a couple times.

You probably heard this before, but the power system is neat.

But yeah, as usually with my feedback, not much else to add besides to say "I like it".

Rating



(Read 5 chapters)
Thoughts

A good fun short read.

Characters aren't too complex, and it seems to be setting up a nice and simple fluff and fun type of story.

The first five chapters were good, looking forward to more.

Rating

fluff and fun pretty much sums it up, just how I like it. Thanks!

 

[CrimsonGenius]

Power of the Elements: Recharge

Jake Ishida expected ordinary days when he moved to a new city. He did not expect the mysterious warrior, Pilot, to give him a strange crystal. The crystal transforms him into the Fire Radiant, a warrior of order. Now, he must learn how to utilize his new powers to fight...

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Here you go.

 

[KersenBloemNL]

Aura: The soul’s true nature

Auras. The embodiment of one’s soul. A power that can only be used by a certain few with an iron will. They grant the user an unique ability that personifies what they are. Some use it for good, others use it for their own gain. Ymeno, a 25 year old...

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I really like your apple rating system, Thanks for doing this!