Bobple's Below Average Feedback Thread [Paused]

[RedMoonBlue]

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/644643/paranoia/

Would you please give me feedback on my story

 

[KDBooks97]

Hello! I love this idea! I am a below average writer, so I'll take some below-average feedback if you're willing ! Provided, of course, you like the premise and would like to read it, as I understand my novel is decidedly not everyone's cup of tea. If you like the premise, read as much or as little as you like. I have 12 chapters and 29K words so far and am updating every 3-5 days.

What I can offer you: A snarky coming-of-age dramady about growing up after high school. Realistic depictions of neurodiversity, sexuality, mental health issues and discovering yourself.

Warning: This story contains themes of Self-harm, religious trauma, depression and anxiety. It is not graphic, but because of the nature of heavy themes throughout, read at your own risk.

The Miserably Macabre Tales of Luna Samuels

'My name is Faith Elizabeth Samuels. Well, it used to be, before I left my fundamentalist helicopter parents and started going by Luna... My counselor tells me writing will help me to 'heal'. Somehow, writing my feelings of depression, anxiety, self harm and suicidal thoughts will negate a...

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[Bobple]

For Want of A House

Waking up is always a difficult part of anyone's day- it's even worse if you wake up inside some squalid room to spit out mysterious black cubes in a land you are not familiar with. Now imagine what Sybil's going through. Watch this short and tempered child grow, seeking a...

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(Read 59 Chapters)
Thoughts

The was a great read. Fun, a little creepy, and a pleasant read.

Main character was a fun point of view, and the world seems interesting.

I was going to complain about chapters being short... BUT, they were nice to read. And honestly, it was just me in the wrong mindset. Been reading a lot of long chapter stories recently, and seeing 50 chapters for this made me put this story on the backburner for a bit (Am/was busy). However as I was saying, they were nicely sized and enjoy reading them when I got around to well, reading the story.

Overall, good shit. Looking forward to more!

Rating

 

[HelloHound]

(Read 59 Chapters)
Thoughts

The was a great read. Fun, a little creepy, and a pleasant read.

Main character was a fun point of view, and the world seems interesting.

I was going to complain about chapters being short... BUT, they were nice to read. And honestly, it was just me in the wrong mindset. Been reading a lot of long chapter stories recently, and seeing 50 chapters for this made me put this story on the backburner for a bit (Am/was busy). However as I was saying, they were nicely sized and enjoy reading them when I got around to well, reading the story.

Overall, good shit. Looking forward to more!

Rating

thanks for your thoughts and the chapter length is something I'm actively working on while writing the new chapters and something I'll get to on the old (eventually)
glad you had a decent time with my story ^-^

 

[Rhaps]

Here is mine.

Infinity in the Void – Freedom in the Abyss

A girl woke up in a white room, with no memory of who she is. Yet she knew deep inside her held a power unlike anyone, represents by the markings, the tattoos of the Eight Pointed Star, given to her by an unknown force. With her power, endless possibilities was...

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Enjoy~

 

[trigger2391]

Hi I would really like your take on my novel

Rise of the Lost

Caliban thought he was your typical young western male. Maybe a bit too heavy but nothing major, he smoked but not a lot. Work was merely to pay the bills and he had a bad habit of wasting his money on junk food, booze, women and entertainment. Until one night...

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I suggest you read the first four chapters. (first chapter in it's entirety is about 5k words) I publish individual scenes in a chapter as the chapters on here simply because it makes the breakup for web novelising easier. The first four scriblehub chapters/scenes represent the first actual chapter as I have it in my writing program in its entirety.

Looking forward to your review.

 

[detroitapollo]

Welcome to Bobple's Below Bverage Beedback Bhread! Wait... *Cough*
Welcome to Bobple's Below Average Feedback Thread.​

Anyway, Been meaning to make one of these for a while, but been busy (Which I still am, but ehh, can't push off doing this forever).

What can I offer you!
Nothing!
But I will read your story here, read some amount of chapters and provide feedback!
Now I may be a "writer", but I ain't a good a one and a newbie, so double the trouble! I awful at noticing mistakes and I read so many stories that range from awful to great all the way through.

So yeah, I'm pretty bad at noticing quality, so yeah.

*Cough* If you want extra good feedback, there are many wonderful people with their own Feedback threads who will do a much better job then me.

Also, this my personal opinion. Which yeah, that's it.

How will it Work?
Post story link here and, I'll read some number of chapters, then I'll provide feedback. (Standard stuff)

You can suggest a minimum number of chapters. I won't necessarily listen to that suggestion, but I will take into consideration!

I will say whatever immediately came to my mind. What I like and I didn't like. However, expect this to pretty generic and probably not that helpful.

After you post whatever you want me to check out here, I'll read it!... Eventually.

(UPDATE) - I'll like the request post to say 'I've seen the request, and I will read it.'

I will also give a rating!
= Good (Maybe something holding it down)
= Good (Yeah, I like it)
= Great (This... is really good)
= Great (Why you asking for feedback?)

If you somehow give me something I actually dislike then you get, .

Please help this poor soul get enough attention. Any reviews will greatly help me.

The Knight Who Was Too Angry to Die (Shinu Hodo Okotsu ta Kishi)

Amidst the dimly lit tapestry of ancient East Asia, a nameless knight from medieval Europe finds himself torn from the familiarity of his war-torn homeland, thrust into mystic Heian period Japan. A tale that commences in eerie twilight, where history and folklore entwine, and the supernatural...

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[Bobple]

Okay, I do plan to read Everything that has been posted here, just needing to find time to do that which has been hard. Priority will be given to stories that were posted earlier.

 

[KDBooks97]

Okay, I do plan to read Everything that has been posted here, just needing to find time to do that which has been hard. Priority will be given to stories that were posted earlier.

Please be kind to yourself and take your time. I'm sure everyone here will be happy to read your comments when you are able to give them. Your work here is very much appreciated!

 

[Numero]

Can you give my novel some of your precious wisdom

Transforming the Word

Zenon's life changed when he came across a fortunate accident that changed his life for better or worse. He obtained an Ancient Magic so unique that it required the combination of two different, yet at the same time suitable entities. Magic and Science...

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[Azure_Fog]

I started writing around a month ago and I would like some feedback. (Also, take your time; no pressure.)

Diary of an Adventuring Vampire

A vampire, an elf, a great spirit, a sealed god, and a princess form a party. What could possibly go wrong? Follow Ei and her friends as they dive into dungeons, travel around the world, and inadvertently cause chaos. Below the Kingdom of Astraeus, the Cult of...

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[TheKillingAlice]

The Crazy Daughter of the Duke’s Family

HIATUS NOTE! This time I won't say a certain date, I initially didn't want to go on hiatus in the middle of the week unless it was for the end of a Season, but this time it can't be helped. There's too much going on in my life, work-related, I...

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If you may, I would be happy. I also like the Apples for rating

 

[Darkodia]

Take a look at any of my stories below if you're interested:

 

[HoracioGui]

I want some feedback pls

Reborn as a Goddess with a World Creation System

After a short and abrupt life, a young girl awakens in a mysterious place and discovers that she has been reincarnated as a goddess with a special system for creating entire worlds. Tired of the boredom of her previous life, she decides to create a new world and mold it...

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[EldritchPotato]

I mean... sure. Choose from below depending on how much horniness you want:

 

[Rockingashe]

Hey! I was wondering if you could give me some feedback on my novel? Thank you in advance! :) https://www.scribblehub.com/read/729348-the-vampiric-lover/chapter/729350/

 

[nii07]

Do you mind checking out two of mine?

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/843745/my-goddess-mother-gave-me-a-system-and-kicked-me-out/

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/843715/bleach-gazing-mirage/