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I will rate your title, first sentence, first paragraph, and first chapter. Most ratings will just be the first chapter and title, but some may need the first sentence or paragraph to be isolated to critique. For example, if your introduction is deceptive it is because the first sentence or paragraph is nothing like the rest of your introduction.
Wasn't going to do this one because, unlike the summary thread, there are already more experienced writers giving first impressions feedback. I was however requested to do it so I might as well.
So post links to your stories here I'll insult them.
If your introduction is more than 1 chapter long, specify that in your request.
Only submit stories if you think your title and introduction could be better. If you know you did good what are you here for?
Scale:
Good: I would personally like it.
Adequate: The title and first chapter actually make the story sound interesting to a general audience and aren't lying about it.
Passable: It does its job as an introduction but still sounds too boring to read.
Deception: The title or introduction sounds cool but it misleads as to what the rest of the introduction or further story is.
Stroke-inducing: Couldn't read your story due to incoherency.
Cancer: Your story sounds like it would be a mild annoyance to read.
Vampire: Your story is an unholy abomination that sucks the life out of anyone that dares to get close to it.
Puppet: Your story is still an unholy abomination (and cringe), but it's bland and unchanging as if it was completely monotone.
Empty:
Wasn't going to do this one because, unlike the summary thread, there are already more experienced writers giving first impressions feedback. I was however requested to do it so I might as well.
So post links to your stories here I'll insult them.
If your introduction is more than 1 chapter long, specify that in your request.
Only submit stories if you think your title and introduction could be better. If you know you did good what are you here for?
Scale:
Good: I would personally like it.
Adequate: The title and first chapter actually make the story sound interesting to a general audience and aren't lying about it.
Passable: It does its job as an introduction but still sounds too boring to read.
Deception: The title or introduction sounds cool but it misleads as to what the rest of the introduction or further story is.
Stroke-inducing: Couldn't read your story due to incoherency.
Cancer: Your story sounds like it would be a mild annoyance to read.
Vampire: Your story is an unholy abomination that sucks the life out of anyone that dares to get close to it.
Puppet: Your story is still an unholy abomination (and cringe), but it's bland and unchanging as if it was completely monotone.
Empty: