Hooooooooo boy. OKAY!
First, before ANYTHING, let the wound sting, and let it pass around and through you. I've skimmed your opening post, and you come off as rather quite defencive. Which, I don't blame you, I was like that when I started writing my book, Solstice (Hells, I even pre-empted a lot of incoming flak, which might explain my relatively low reader count).
I did read over your first chapter, and while I found it quite verbose and challenging to read through especially as I was reading it to assess the review and not natively, it did NOT deserve THAT. That said, I suspect you have several factors in your book that could lead to this sort of reaction:
- You have a serious description and a snarky protagonist. It's a bit of a tonal shift that can knock someone off their rocker for a bit. I personally actually like Ambrosia's commentary, but I'm also a bit of an Untitled Goose.
- Your book is called Oracle of Tao, and has very strong Eastern Philosophical theming, but then you bring in YHWH, or as you may better know him, the capital G Judeo-Christian God. Or that's how like everyone is going to view your GOD character because pretty much everyone's going to think Abrahamic religions when they see Capital-G God. You're straying well off the beaten path here, and honestly props, but it IS a risky maneuver. You do you, however, and it seems like you did.
- That insurance bit in your chapter CAN, WILL, and HAS ruffled the feathers of quite a few people. Especially if this reviewer was in the US, this is extremely hot-button. Economics is unfortunately married to politics, which, well, turns peoples' brains off. This reviewer clearly read your first chapter, decided the points you espoused were UTTERLY REPREHENSIBLE and chose to lead a personal crusade against you.
- The medicine commentary will also cause people to think of antivax, and other politicking, and is going to set people off. You seem like you put considerable research into this, and that is commendable, but people get polarised very easily, and at some point conversation breaks down.
- You did mention this in your description, and I commend you for it, but I can SEE the remnants of the RPG this started out as. 100cp=10sp=1gp, MP, A blank name for a town, explicitly suggesting that it can be named at will? A lot of SOD walls are going to break from this more than I think anything else, just because of how utterly differently literature plays than CRPGs.
- You're a published author who is presumably actually making money from this. One-Shot Protection is GONE for you, and people feel especially empowered to go on the attack. A lot of readers (myself included) will be significantly nicer toward newer authors.
I'm not saying whether I agree or disagree with any of these points, but I'm pointing out possible reasons why this might have happened. (Personally, I really despise that the TQ+ community loves to hurl "internalized transphobia" at people. Especially when they're writing purposely outside of their experiences and beliefs as an exercise in self-growth. But that's an aside.)
I can do an actual proper review of your first chapter if you'd like, maybe even as far as 5 chapters, but it will be slow.
But I absolutely implore you, meditate on your emotions. You're in a spot of extreme hurt, and it WILL colour how you handle yourself and those around you. Hurt people hurt people. Just how it works. It is tragic, but while this reviewer is a jerk, others will be genuinely trying to help, and we owe it to our friends and family and lovers and siblings to foster what little warmth we can in this cold world.
I apologise if this is unwelcome, but i hope any of this helps.
If you'd like to rant or vent toward, or at, me, either on main or here, you can message me. The TLDR here is: You went off the beaten trail, which is cool, but sometimes random encounters happen (people dislike it).