HabitualChaos
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Hi there,
I would kind of like to get feedback on an idea to see if it helps me.
I want to write a story, but I'm more comfortable with fanfiction. However, I'm worried the theme may be too unconventional. (Not wish fulfillment)
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In the realm of valor and justice, there stood Leon Ashbourne, a paladin of unwavering courage that vowed to protect everyone. But when fate dealt him a devastating blow, witnessing his beloved family - wife and daughter - perish before his very eyes, he was left adrift in a sea of despair and emptiness.
Yet, amidst the darkness that threatened to consume him, a glimmer of hope emerged - the pursuit of evildoers, a chance to bring vengeance to those who wrought pain upon the innocent. In a world that had taken everything from him, this became his sole escape and new vow, the oath of vengeance.
Upon his death, he hopes to reunite with his family but discovers himself in a new world where noble souls dwell and find rest - Elysium. Only heroes recognized by the universe have that opportunity. For Leon, this was anything but an honor. The rest and meeting with his family had not come.
However, there he finds an opportunity to save his wife and daughter: Answer the calls of the heroes. Where different worlds call for heroes when they need their services.
By becoming stronger, he could then reach a level where he could save his family. However, each world Leon finds himself challenged with his own fears and misconceptions and enemies that seem much bigger than he expected.
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Sound interesting?
I rewrote it a few times; I had some ideas like having the character being an Isekai of a common human (Cliche, but always interesting haha).
I went back because I believe it avoids the emotional baggage of Leon's past.
The worlds I thought about using are the ready ones, so it would be a fanfiction, but I don't know if it's attractive.
I'm really in doubt and was thinking of stopping writing about, so I'm really in need of feedback.
English is not my first language, sorry if is a bit off.
Thanks in advance
I would kind of like to get feedback on an idea to see if it helps me.
I want to write a story, but I'm more comfortable with fanfiction. However, I'm worried the theme may be too unconventional. (Not wish fulfillment)
-----
In the realm of valor and justice, there stood Leon Ashbourne, a paladin of unwavering courage that vowed to protect everyone. But when fate dealt him a devastating blow, witnessing his beloved family - wife and daughter - perish before his very eyes, he was left adrift in a sea of despair and emptiness.
Yet, amidst the darkness that threatened to consume him, a glimmer of hope emerged - the pursuit of evildoers, a chance to bring vengeance to those who wrought pain upon the innocent. In a world that had taken everything from him, this became his sole escape and new vow, the oath of vengeance.
Upon his death, he hopes to reunite with his family but discovers himself in a new world where noble souls dwell and find rest - Elysium. Only heroes recognized by the universe have that opportunity. For Leon, this was anything but an honor. The rest and meeting with his family had not come.
However, there he finds an opportunity to save his wife and daughter: Answer the calls of the heroes. Where different worlds call for heroes when they need their services.
By becoming stronger, he could then reach a level where he could save his family. However, each world Leon finds himself challenged with his own fears and misconceptions and enemies that seem much bigger than he expected.
-----
Sound interesting?
I rewrote it a few times; I had some ideas like having the character being an Isekai of a common human (Cliche, but always interesting haha).
I went back because I believe it avoids the emotional baggage of Leon's past.
The worlds I thought about using are the ready ones, so it would be a fanfiction, but I don't know if it's attractive.
I'm really in doubt and was thinking of stopping writing about, so I'm really in need of feedback.
English is not my first language, sorry if is a bit off.
Thanks in advance
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