MagicalPen
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The title says it all, but lemme add somethings.
Isn't it joyful to get know MC(s) more with every chapter? Can't you tell that someone studies in college by highlighting his/her nervousness for some upcoming exams? or just tell that MC is not happy by describing his/her gloomy room and empty schedule? Or mention his/her age when he/she conducts a job interview.
I don't hate it because WN are supposed to be light, but not to light to make a passage about MC's life sounds like a job resume.
Story is made of bunch of scenes, not dry factual informations. It throws me off track, and feels so amateurish and I can't stress this enough.
For example:
Isn't it joyful to get know MC(s) more with every chapter? Can't you tell that someone studies in college by highlighting his/her nervousness for some upcoming exams? or just tell that MC is not happy by describing his/her gloomy room and empty schedule? Or mention his/her age when he/she conducts a job interview.
I don't hate it because WN are supposed to be light, but not to light to make a passage about MC's life sounds like a job resume.
Story is made of bunch of scenes, not dry factual informations. It throws me off track, and feels so amateurish and I can't stress this enough.
For example:
Hey.. nice to meet you.
Hmm, so where do I start... I'm blabla. I study bliblob and I work here/there/somewhere as [Insert job you hate], and today I feel like introducing myself even though the story is beginning in the middle since I've working here for months.
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