LilRora
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So, basically, I want you to read this sentence and tell me what you make of it:
The steps were coming from her left, so there was a good chance she did not meet whatever was making the noise.
I mean the narration in particular, what does the narrator know about the events being described.
What my problem is here is the fact that my default interpretation is that the narrator did not learn if she met the thing and is simply speculating, while I want the narrator to be a direct observer of the events, not one that recounts the tale afterwards. I was thinking of replacing 'did not' with 'would not' or 'would not have', but... I'm not sure if either works?
What are your thoughts about it?
Oh, and I'm gonna say it now. I'm not looking for proffesional opinion. I spent last hour trying to choose either of the three options by logic and it only got me more confused. What I'm looking for is impressions, specifically first thoughts about where in time the narrator is.
The steps were coming from her left, so there was a good chance she did not meet whatever was making the noise.
I mean the narration in particular, what does the narrator know about the events being described.
What my problem is here is the fact that my default interpretation is that the narrator did not learn if she met the thing and is simply speculating, while I want the narrator to be a direct observer of the events, not one that recounts the tale afterwards. I was thinking of replacing 'did not' with 'would not' or 'would not have', but... I'm not sure if either works?
What are your thoughts about it?
Oh, and I'm gonna say it now. I'm not looking for proffesional opinion. I spent last hour trying to choose either of the three options by logic and it only got me more confused. What I'm looking for is impressions, specifically first thoughts about where in time the narrator is.