EncryptedWriting
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Hiya!
So, I have been writing for ages, and I recently started a new story for a contest! I just need some feedback on the first chapter to know whether it is intriguing or not. I have gone back and edited 3x but I know there are still a few, very small, errors hidden within there.
Obviously if you’re up for it, then you can read on and give me more feedback. If not, then that is fine! Thank you loads!
Synopsis/summary: Earth is ruined. All that is left are wastelands from where humans used to live. People are resigned to different stations around the world where they fight to stay alive. It is a caste system so strict that one step out of line will mean certain death.
Willow has awoken in a place she doesn't know and with no memory of who she is. She is known by a number and treated like an animal trapped within a cage. She wants to find out who she is, what is happening to her, and why she is there.
With war raging, climate change growing, and people dying, the world is looking towards a new variation of weapons, but what if those weapons don't want to be controlled like puppets? What if they want to be... free?
Genre: Dystopian, sci-fi, low-fantasy, and YA fiction.
Patient 227
So, I have been writing for ages, and I recently started a new story for a contest! I just need some feedback on the first chapter to know whether it is intriguing or not. I have gone back and edited 3x but I know there are still a few, very small, errors hidden within there.
Obviously if you’re up for it, then you can read on and give me more feedback. If not, then that is fine! Thank you loads!
Synopsis/summary: Earth is ruined. All that is left are wastelands from where humans used to live. People are resigned to different stations around the world where they fight to stay alive. It is a caste system so strict that one step out of line will mean certain death.
Willow has awoken in a place she doesn't know and with no memory of who she is. She is known by a number and treated like an animal trapped within a cage. She wants to find out who she is, what is happening to her, and why she is there.
With war raging, climate change growing, and people dying, the world is looking towards a new variation of weapons, but what if those weapons don't want to be controlled like puppets? What if they want to be... free?
Genre: Dystopian, sci-fi, low-fantasy, and YA fiction.
Patient 227