Need to know if good, or should I write again

[BigHoodieBoy]

Would like to know if it's bad enough to warrant a re-write

My Story

 

[greyblob]

Would like to know if it's bad enough to warrant a re-write

My Story

rewrite what. there is literally 1 chapter

 

[BigHoodieBoy]

rewrite what. there is literally 1 chapter

the introduction

 

[greyblob]

the introduction

not sure what to tell you. there's 20 lines of text and the rest is skill/item descriptions. it'd also be better if you put these descriptions in a table or box

 

[K5Rakitan]