Rewriting Saving Face

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I realized it wasn't doing well here, and I had to wonder why. I read over it and decided the tense I'd experimented with when I wrote it just wasn't working as well as I'd hoped. I'm changing the tense from present to past, and I'm working on making it more engaging all-throughout, if I can.

I'm planning to eventually upload it to Scribble Hub again. I removed it because It'd only garnered a single favorite. I was sad to toss that single fave out because even one is important, yet I felt I could offer up a better version.

Well, anyhow, the sad part is I'm not going to have editing services on it any time soon. Chances are, it will be more raw than any of my works are currently. I hope some would be interested in reading it when it's offered up. I'm breaking it up into smaller parts... well what I consider small in any case. XD

Most around here submit shorter chapters over a longer term, I've noticed. What I consider short chapters is around four pages or so in Google Docs at 11px Verdana for most of it. The original work was a novelette. I'm not sure how long it will be in the end, probably it wouldn't reach novel-length. The story is solid and cute, but the way I told it might have not been optimal. '^^ It was written for Halloween originally as an event short story.
 

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Oh I wrote this before sleeping but before drifting off I realized I hadn't explained the story. I'll sum it up quickly before I do. It's about a young salaryman in Japan who encounters a noh face on a train, loses his face and has to race to recover his identity. He has a Halloween adventure around Tokyo. That's about as unspoilerific as I can make it. XD
 

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Giving this thread a watch so that I can see any future comments, so please comment when youve finished the rewrite so i can give it a read!
 

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Rewriting isn't saving face but a way to admit your mistake. It's a show of commitment that you're willing to salvage your story but rebooting it instead of just going headstrong without realising your mistake. I've recently done that to a story of mine and lemme tell you, I haven't had a fresher breath of air since I butchered that dead horse for a new, improved one.

Giving this a watch so I won't miss out.
 

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Awesome! The original didn't do well! I'm sure I have an idea why that was the case!
 

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I've reached 6 chapters added/recreated. I'm still just under halfway through the project, but it's going well I think. I'd certainly be happy if someone who beta read it compared it with the original work. The original had the editing services of Trismegistus Shandy, but unless he frees up before I think to post it up in places, it may not have his touch on it. It'd be poorer for the lack, I'm sure. :3 I'm doing my best though.
 

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It'll be a challenge to make a cover for this, but a banner for chapters is probably the best I can do until I think more.
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I modified my signature, and while I was at it I attacked the Saving Face banner again, and whew... okay... I think I have a winner... XD
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