What do you all think of my synopsis?

[CrimsonGenius]

I am 18 chapters in... but I want your critique of the summary.


"Chaotic forces have emerged and warriors of the elements are needed. A teenage boy becomes the next warrior of fire in order to not only fight against the agents of chaos, but to protect those close to him. Fighting villains and crossing worlds is just part of adolescence... right?"

 

[Mellohwa]

Imho, not catchy kenough

 

[MintiLime]

it feels a little generic. In fantasy, anime, etc. … yeah it is a typical part of adolescence. What makes *these worlds* *these chaotic forces* and *this* teenage boy special?
what’s the title? I’ll give it a quick read and then I can update my feedback.

 

[CrimsonGenius]

it feels a little generic. In fantasy, anime, etc. … yeah it is a typical part of adolescence. What makes *these worlds* *these chaotic forces* and *this* teenage boy special?
what’s the title? I’ll give it a quick read and then I can update my feedback.

Okay, buy all I want to know if I should change the synopsis.

 

[Terrate]

Okay, buy all I want to know if I should change the synopsis.

The title asks what we think of the synopsis. Now, all you want is to actually know if you should change it? That should've been the title in the first place.

Now on to the synopsis. Yes, you should change it, it's too short and doesn't really explain much. You basically summarized what a shounen synopsis looks like. Maybe add something more to the words that would make it seem different? like what kind of Warrior of fire he's gonna be and what kind of worlds are he going to cross. Can't really say much more since I don't know your story other than fighting "villains"

 

[Temple]

Okay, buy all I want to know if I should change the synopsis.

That depends on what your goal is. If you just want a summary, then that's it. If you want to attract more readers, then make it have more impact. Some hook. As is, it looks like a standard YA story, and it's not standing out.

 

[NotaNuffian]

No. I don't think the generic words need to be changed. After all, you are going for the generic style of teen hero up againsting evil. Whether or not have school life element is up for debate.

If that is what you are writing for, then go for it.

If you must change, ask yourself what else you can add?

The MC name? The troubles in detail? The stakes, not just his family and friends lives, but also his own personal relationship?

 

[MintiLime]

Okay, buy all I want to know if I should change the synopsis.

A lot of times people try to make the summary match the style of the story, which is why I thought reading a few chapters could give me better insight into whether your synopsis captured the story’s spirit. For example, you could look at TheMonotonePuppet’s story Charisma. It’s summary is actually an introduction from the perspective of the MC, the unreliable narrator.

 

[CrimsonGenius]

I redid the synopsis.

Power of the Elements: Recharge

Jake Ishida expected ordinary days when he moved to a new city. He did not expect the mysterious warrior, Pilot, to give him a strange crystal. The crystal transforms him into the Fire Radiant, a warrior of order. Now, he must learn how to utilize his new powers to fight...

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[TheMonotonePuppet]

A lot of times people try to make the summary match the style of the story, which is why I thought reading a few chapters could give me better insight into whether your synopsis captured the story’s spirit. For example, you could look at TheMonotonePuppet’s story Charisma. It’s summary is actually an introduction from the perspective of the MC, the unreliable narrator.

OHMYSTARS! People! Talking about my story! Without me having started the conversation!!! Oh my stars!!! ⭐️

I redid the synopsis.

Power of the Elements: Recharge

Jake Ishida expected ordinary days when he moved to a new city. He did not expect the mysterious warrior, Pilot, to give him a strange crystal. The crystal transforms him into the Fire Radiant, a warrior of order. Now, he must learn how to utilize his new powers to fight...

www.scribblehub.com

This also feels generic, but I think it is an improvement! If you don’t want to change it more, just delete the word “named” and it should get more readers.

 

[CrimsonGenius]

OHMYSTARS! People! Talking about my story! Without me having started the conversation!!! Oh my stars!!! ⭐️

This also feels generic, but I think it is an improvement! If you don’t want to change it more, just delete the word “named” and it should get more readers.

Okay