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You said it best. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/848947/dark-one-a-progression-fantasy/

I only post a chapter a day. Checked. It wasn't in the same time zone as myself. I've changed it though. My next post is on Wednesday so just maybe this could be fixed with that. But it brings a question to mind; how has it been working before? I've never changed this time zone before and it...

It's happened twice now! And each time I go to delete the schedule and re-upload the chapter. However, the chapter doesn't show up on the main page due to Scribblehub's policies, I think. I need someone to fix this ASAP!

Would love your opinion on mine as well. You can leave your feedback in the ratings/reviews. Thanks. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/848947/dark-one-a-progression-fantasy/

Thanks a lot for this! This is what I needed. I knew there was something I wasn't getting right and I think you've pointed out the crux of the matter. The first pov in the first chapter is third person omniscient. My brain has been skipping over that since I wrote it. I ought to have turned it...

Thanks a lot. I really appreciate. I did do a little touch up before seeing your response. I'll keep working on it.

True. But what I did is make sure no one is talking over another. There is only one leader among for of the characters. And most importantly, perspective matters. The story reads from the perspective of just one person in different scenes so I believe readers should be able to follow. This is...

That’s interesting. I feel the rapport between characters set the stage so the readers know at the back of their minds the connection between characters. Nevertheless, I’m grateful for your feedback. I may not be able to reduce the amount of characters in that first chapter, but I can you use...

Thanks a lot for this. I really appreciate.

Thanks for this. I remember reading about the specifics of this thread but I think I forgot and just went ahead to post my story's signature - sorry about that. I honestly didn't know that about a prologue - I'm a new writer as it is and didn't think to look. I've also changed the title of the...

You didn't read the prologue (1. Prologue). You jumped straight to 2. Slum Rats. The prologue is where the story starts. And I believe if you had read it before this chapter you critiqued, you would have known who Jerome is, how old he is, and what he had been doing outside the orphanage. Maybe...

Thanks a lot for the feedback. Can you tell me what you felt the pacing was like? And was it difficult to follow the story and the characters introduced in the first chapter - that is their conversation?

Would be glad if you could check mine out as well. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/848947/dark-one-a-progression-fantasy/

If you don't mind my lateness to your free feedback party. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/848947/dark-one-a-progression-fantasy/

Hi, New author here. Don't have a lot of chapters out but would love a feedback as well, if you still got the time. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/848947/dark-one-a-progression-fantasy/