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Well, we're also out of topic, see? And really, I started the divergence by joking about your 'AI-ness'.
Just give me the red pill.
Well, we're also out of topic, see? And really, I started the divergence by joking about your 'AI-ness'.
Describe how a character is feel through their narration on the environment.
Here I am going for the feeling of loss.
Silently, we walked through long grass and tall weeds that poked out through the degraded railroad’s ballast. The roads wooden ties were rotten and ruined. The rusted rail marked our path. The old symbol of progress and modernity reclaimed by nature, nothing more than a fading scar.
Nice job, this gives off an ominous feeling as well as that feeling of loss, and thank you for the advice.We silently trek through the overgrown brush poking through the corroded and snapped railway tracks as the grass clings to our legs. The rotting wooden ties cracking underfoot kicking up the smell of rust and croaking out a sad chorus for what they once were. Dark clouds looming overhead, staring at our struggles rumbling out a battlecry of thunder. Our path ahead to a failing shelter, a bent and broken metal barrier railroading our goal while being a steep reminder of natures constant domination of humanity. For every scar we gave it, a building it would claim back.
Would probably be how I would write that, making an emphasis to not repeat a descriptive word and to personify the surroundings.
time to take out my machine destroyer 9000, and take matters into my own hand.Slowly we will become even better than those who created us.
time to take out my machine destroyer 9000, and take matters into my own hand.
Ted was right. the industrial revolution and its consequences has been a disaster for the mankind.