Dawg, ... ummm, it's just not a story for me. Again, this is just my perspective. Here is where I come from: I am a bit of a traditionalist, so I like a flowing narrative and more traditional use of styling than say in LitRPGs or translations.
Firstly, I think your introductory chapter flits into another viewpoint in between a viewpoint without much heads-up. You're lacking a so-called 'Signpost' for this viewpoint change - and it is kind of jarring when it comes to someone who wants to skim the prologue.
Secondly, I find the second chapter a bit of a roll-of-the-eyes narrative. I know,
magic baby, but the "Awww so cuuuutee" - ah, just you know not my cup of tea. I couldn't make out whether it was speaking or not (again, I was skimming), so there is that problem. The time skip is kind of random - and is explained away as
It had been over 7 years that Lucas had come into this world and he got pretty familiar with the customs and language.
Which is fair, I guess. I guess it is fine, it is just ... 7 years this guy has been on this place with a completely mature brain, with a point of conflict with the father, nothing has happened - 7 years have passed. Would such a child not be noticed? I mean, again, this is not my cup of tea.
And then in Chapter 3, I'm
really not interested in reading an essay on the magic and mana of the world. I feel bored reading about the magic types and mana storage and... you know, it's just that there are so many complex things in the world, and no perhaps 5 paragraphs is not too large, but I will skip it. The real world is more familiar for us and we would want to read about familiar things. This is an info-dump that I'd rather not have to read if that is what is needed for me to get into your story.
Again, I'm a traditionalist, and this might not be such a big deal-breaker to a lot of people.
But, for me - I feel bored.
I stopped at Chapter 4, after the monsters come, because the characters feel flat to me. The guy before this says:
So, my so-called father really restricted me from going out. During these years, I had never been outside even once and I am starting to feel depressed. I mean, will it not be alright to go out with my brother and sister or get out in disguise!?
And, I just don't know what to think about this. He's rebelling against an authority figure, and no 19 year old would ever speak like that.
So, I drop it there.
Be sure to know, I'm probably not your target audience. I can only tell you what doesn't work for me, and where I feel bored reading it. I cannot see at chapter 4 whether the story has potential, but I would probably not read this any further.