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Just read your work! Ratings Setting Descriptions : 3.6 / 5 Characters : 4.2 / 5 Character Descriptions : 3 / 5 Dialogue : 2.5 / 5 Flow : 3 / 5 Overall : 3.3 / 5 Review : You have a good work. I read through and yeah, couple of mistakes and all, nothing unreadable. It does break the flow a...

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I suppose it progresses the plot, sets the characters and all. Could use some more details and descriptions for immersion. Not really sure on the dialogue, maybe you could make it sound a bit more natural? That and I suppose showing some actions happening would be alright. Try not to worry...

Just read your first chapter! Ratings Setting Descriptions : 4 / 5 Characters : 4 / 5 Character Descriptions : 3 / 5 Dialogue : 4 / 5 Flow : 4 / 5 Overall : 3.8 / 5 Review : I like the contrast being created between the Main Character and his environment. It's very telling and by the...

Just caught up with Chapter 9. Pleasant read! I like how the interactions between Flor and Sylvar were. Premise picked up steam too, bit of a delight with the questions being pulled up. I think there's a bit of hesitance from your end in drawing certain moments out, given that it's First...

Just read your first chapter! Ratings Setting Descriptions : 3 / 5 Characters : 4 / 5 Character Descriptions : 2 / 5 Dialogue : 3 / 5 Flow : 1.5 / 5 Overall : 2.7 / 5 Review : You have a fairly interesting premise with a nice character duo. The Wizard Elf is a stark contrast to the brawny...

lovely demonstration on the breaking up of paragraphs! Buuuuuuuut there is one too many "hes" in there, don't you think? No doubt, this is a fast and effective way to break up paragraphs. It's simple too! Just would want a little touch-up to it all and it would *be* absolutely...

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Hey, newbie here.