YeshuasHeart
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Spoiler Alert: I'm wondering if this excerpt is considered too offensive to post in my upcoming chapter on Scribble Hub. My main character's a minor getting bullied for her curvy body and I don't want to post sexualized minors on it. If it is offensive, what do I need to take out?
Excerpt: " Calpurnia quickly walked towards Tifara and tripped over Tifara's legs halfway towards Tifara's homeroom class. Eh?! Tifara thought while she fell down in the air. Once Tifara's body slammed against the white, tiled floor, the students around her chattered louder all the sudden. The boys' cheeks blushed when they looked at Tifara and the girls including Calpurnia and her friends laughed at her and gossiped about her even more than ever before. Tifara raised head up from the floor and curiously looked up at the crowd, raising her eyebrow.
"Nice panties you got there, Titsfara," Calpurnia said, "They look so good on you."
Huh?! Tifara thought, closing her eyes, reddening her embarrassed cheeks, when she quickly rolled down her skirt all the way down to two inches above her knees. Then she sat up and put her head down. She was lucky that the school banned their students from bringing their phones to school, because otherwise they would've taken pictures of her panties and posted them on social media! I-I-I can't believe it...Tifara thought, I can't believe my first day of school has gotten worse. First, I faced the same kind of treatment as last year. Second, Calpurnia had breakfast with Saul. Now Calpurnia embarrassed me like this. I have never been...this embarrassed in my entire life! How much worse can this day possibly get?! Tifara looked up at the ceiling with her sad look on her face. Oh, Elohim...Tifara sadly thought, Please help me... "
Excerpt: " Calpurnia quickly walked towards Tifara and tripped over Tifara's legs halfway towards Tifara's homeroom class. Eh?! Tifara thought while she fell down in the air. Once Tifara's body slammed against the white, tiled floor, the students around her chattered louder all the sudden. The boys' cheeks blushed when they looked at Tifara and the girls including Calpurnia and her friends laughed at her and gossiped about her even more than ever before. Tifara raised head up from the floor and curiously looked up at the crowd, raising her eyebrow.
"Nice panties you got there, Titsfara," Calpurnia said, "They look so good on you."
Huh?! Tifara thought, closing her eyes, reddening her embarrassed cheeks, when she quickly rolled down her skirt all the way down to two inches above her knees. Then she sat up and put her head down. She was lucky that the school banned their students from bringing their phones to school, because otherwise they would've taken pictures of her panties and posted them on social media! I-I-I can't believe it...Tifara thought, I can't believe my first day of school has gotten worse. First, I faced the same kind of treatment as last year. Second, Calpurnia had breakfast with Saul. Now Calpurnia embarrassed me like this. I have never been...this embarrassed in my entire life! How much worse can this day possibly get?! Tifara looked up at the ceiling with her sad look on her face. Oh, Elohim...Tifara sadly thought, Please help me... "