I think it needs a rework. It is smushed and distorted. People will not mind much, but after a certain time, it may be a hindrance and deter people from giving your story a try.
It is good, but I don't know if the Book 1 detail is necessary. But that's just me, the rest is telling enough what to expect!
It is long enough to give us the premise, the main characters, and the setting. Also, it foreshadows that there is more to it than just a smut monster girl novel, so I think it is fine. Would I add anything? Hmm... I thought about it, but I think not. It's good.
It's all good.
Nice and tidy.
Final thoughts:
- Hm... Sounds nice. You got my attention.
The cover is nice, but it should be properly cut and resized to get rid of the white line at the top.
It is good, but having an all-caps title is obnoxious. Easily deters people from reading it.
Too short. It tells very little; it says nothing more than Sun Tzu quote. I would skip it instantly because it feels pretentious instead of reader-welcoming. We need more background info first, or it just feels like the MC is an edgy kid.
It's okay, but more tags would lead to more discoverability.
Inconsistent. Chapter 1 has sub-title, Chapter 2 doesn't.
Final thoughts:
- Just redo it... (This won't bring in readers. This is bad.)
- Every point except the tags needs work.
Really nice. I really dig it. Trippy. The font is a bit hard to read at first, but other than that, it's all good. And the font is not really a problem.
Nice and interesting.
I like it, but I feel like there are pacing issues with it. I can't really explain why, but the sentences felt too short and monotone while reading it. Maybe I am used to longer sentences, or that's just me. Here is a quick rewrite of what made me feel reading the synopsis to flow better; maybe it will give you an idea of what I mean.
All good.
It's okay, no issues.
Final thoughts:
- Hm... Sounds nice. You got my attention. (Good.)
- Maybe a synopsis needs a little fixup? But that could be just my preference.
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Sorry for the late reply; I am very busy and totally missed looking at my thread.
For now, I will not do it anymore as I just don't have the time. Until further notice, I am not accepting any more submissions.